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Permanent Solution · 10-18-2004, 09:22 PM

That remark'll cost you a point felon

6495 - I didn't overly enjoy this piece, anytime I felt like I had the flow you killed it again. Clearly a song, so lack of flow is not good.
pixiesfanyo - I am lost as to the meaning of the first two lines, they are written in horrible English. Interesting, with spurts of both greatness and inferiority.
A_Perfect_Sonnet - Rhyming was real sketchy frequently, which is not ok in this piece. Not overly impressive.
hotcod32 - Meh, not too original, all the strong diction you used seems out of place in such a simplistic piece. Really formulaic = too much repetition.
Disco Dragon - Pretty good. A few topics are discussed in a cliche way, but pulled off nicely nonetheless.
zeppelinfan2k3 - Me.
ta'ao - Very impressively done, mayne good things here, however, you lack the flow that is trademark of great sonnets, which hurts it quite a bit.
addicted_tochaos - A few generic/cliche descriptions bring this down a lot, they stick out like a sore thumb.
DFelon204009 - Solid piece, I liked it. The only problem is I don't know why I do...
sketchyjoe - A few weaker rhymes. Fitting to the style of music described, but that style is not very appreciated here, too simplistic. You also overused fuck, and it lost any power it should have had.
green day punk - Cliche.
SubtleDagger - Interesting rhyme sceme. Solid piece, A few cliche lines and images bring it down.

1.DFelon
2.Disco Dragon
3.ta'ao
4.SubtleDagger
5.pixies
6.sketchyjoe
7.atc
8.aps
9.6945
10.hotcod
11.green day punk

10-18-2004, 09:22 PM	#3
Permanent Solution Feb. PPOTM \m/ Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: In a theater near you Posts: 41,441	That remark'll cost you a point felon 6495 - I didn't overly enjoy this piece, anytime I felt like I had the flow you killed it again. Clearly a song, so lack of flow is not good. pixiesfanyo - I am lost as to the meaning of the first two lines, they are written in horrible English. Interesting, with spurts of both greatness and inferiority. A_Perfect_Sonnet - Rhyming was real sketchy frequently, which is not ok in this piece. Not overly impressive. hotcod32 - Meh, not too original, all the strong diction you used seems out of place in such a simplistic piece. Really formulaic = too much repetition. Disco Dragon - Pretty good. A few topics are discussed in a cliche way, but pulled off nicely nonetheless. zeppelinfan2k3 - Me. ta'ao - Very impressively done, mayne good things here, however, you lack the flow that is trademark of great sonnets, which hurts it quite a bit. addicted_tochaos - A few generic/cliche descriptions bring this down a lot, they stick out like a sore thumb. DFelon204009 - Solid piece, I liked it. The only problem is I don't know why I do... sketchyjoe - A few weaker rhymes. Fitting to the style of music described, but that style is not very appreciated here, too simplistic. You also overused fuck, and it lost any power it should have had. green day punk - Cliche. SubtleDagger - Interesting rhyme sceme. Solid piece, A few cliche lines and images bring it down. 1.DFelon 2.Disco Dragon 3.ta'ao 4.SubtleDagger 5.pixies 6.sketchyjoe 7.atc 8.aps 9.6945 10.hotcod 11.green day punk Last edited by Permanent Solution; 10-25-2004 at 10:20 PM.