hmmm... the whole track seems a little too slow for me. the vocals sound a little bit like... they don't fit? i'm not sure, they just bother me a little. the drummer's timing is off in a few parts.
your band seems like it has a lot of potential though. and a side note: the vocals seem a little high in the mix, but maybe that's just me.
if you have the time, please critique my latest song:
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=252703