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I like it. At first read I thought you repeated the verse...instead near identical structure. Good use of parallelism there. Lengthy unless its a fast song, but well composed none the less. Not that lengthy is bad, most of mine are too, but I was just saying that...nevermind...I'm getting tired I guess. Anyways good solid piece, in the bridge maybe change rhyme structure, aaaa is usually boring when sung, i'd say use aabb, abba, or abac, it would be better imo. The chorus is good but maybe overused, it appears as much as the verses b/c of the double repeats, but your choice, your song. That's all I saw. Good work.
always never is mine if you have a chance, thanks!
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