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Old 09-12-2004, 02:18 PM   #6
I.might.be.retarded
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i liked it until this verse

Now that you are dead and gone
It seems that my life can go on
Learn a lesson everyday
Must we go or can we stay?

the first two lines of that are so cliche. it just kind of ruined it for me

i did like these lines quite a bit though:

Then there was that lonesome day
The sky was dark the clouds turned gray

those seemed to flow pretty well and kind of stuck out to me. i do like this one better than "eulogy"
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