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Permanent Solution · 09-08-2004, 04:18 PM

Ok...this is my first song ever so please be nice to it.

Intro
Verse
Riff
Verse
Chorus (plays twice)
Riff
Solo (over verse progression) about 50s long (need to write on paper still)
Verse
Chorus
Verse
Riff (fade out during repeat)

All this **** I hold within
I just can’t keep takin’ it
And every single word you say
Hurts me deeply anyway

Hangin’ at the old town park
Thought that we would never part
Then there was that lonesome day
The sky was dark the clouds turned gray

(like) adding salt onto the wound
Like feasting on my long dead flesh
You will always drain my soul
Life carries on forever more
Like adding salt onto the wound
Like feasting on my long dead flesh
You will always drain my soul
Life carries on forever more

Now that you are dead and gone
It seems that my life can go on
Learn a lesson everyday
Must we go or can we stay?

(like) adding salt onto the wound
Like feasting on my long dead flesh
You will always drain my soul
Life carries on forever more
Like adding salt onto the wound
Like feasting on my long dead flesh
You will always drain my soul
Life carries on forever more

Life goes on despite the loss
Nothing comes without a cost
Lying dead upon the cross
When water then begins to frost

Ok...that's it lemme know if you want chords posted for it, starts out at half-time for intro then steps into power chords punkish 150 bpm for the song.

09-08-2004, 04:18 PM	#1
Permanent Solution Feb. PPOTM \m/ Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: In a theater near you Posts: 41,441	Forever More-please crit Ok...this is my first song ever so please be nice to it. Intro Verse Riff Verse Chorus (plays twice) Riff Solo (over verse progression) about 50s long (need to write on paper still) Verse Chorus Verse Riff (fade out during repeat) All this **** I hold within I just can’t keep takin’ it And every single word you say Hurts me deeply anyway Hangin’ at the old town park Thought that we would never part Then there was that lonesome day The sky was dark the clouds turned gray (like) adding salt onto the wound Like feasting on my long dead flesh You will always drain my soul Life carries on forever more Like adding salt onto the wound Like feasting on my long dead flesh You will always drain my soul Life carries on forever more Now that you are dead and gone It seems that my life can go on Learn a lesson everyday Must we go or can we stay? (like) adding salt onto the wound Like feasting on my long dead flesh You will always drain my soul Life carries on forever more Like adding salt onto the wound Like feasting on my long dead flesh You will always drain my soul Life carries on forever more Life goes on despite the loss Nothing comes without a cost Lying dead upon the cross When water then begins to frost Ok...that's it lemme know if you want chords posted for it, starts out at half-time for intro then steps into power chords punkish 150 bpm for the song.