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rest_in_pieces · 04-23-2004, 01:35 PM

i liked that, i could easily envision that as a song.

the only thing i can point out (which you'll probably be able to clear up) is this:

"They conceal me with every swear"

I wasnt sure what that meant.

Good job though,

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04-23-2004, 01:35 PM	#11
rest_in_pieces Dunghyde Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Dorset, UK Posts: 557	i liked that, i could easily envision that as a song. the only thing i can point out (which you'll probably be able to clear up) is this: "They conceal me with every swear" I wasnt sure what that meant. Good job though, Could you crit my song please?: [URL=http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=172702&page=1&pp=20]Click here[/url]