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Old 04-09-2004, 02:11 PM   #5
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Structure???

Trying to fing structure in the verses. The chorus is OK - nothing shouts death like the overused phrase "sleep forever" or "forever sleep"....

Hard to write riffs to.. sorry - maybe you should take the idea and simple up the content to give it more of a rhythm. Sometime less words in a sentence is better than more...
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