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Old 02-03-2004, 11:43 PM   #1
Jofus_the_Canadian
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I'm back...

Hey all...how's it going? Long time since I've been in here. I've been out and about...workin and schoolin and all that jazz. I haven't really written much since I left...just bits and pieces. So here's my latest finished piece...crit and tear apart and whatnot. I'll get to critting as soon as I'm typin this ****e out.

Yesterday

Spoken with a random intertwining guitar/bass line
Imagine...today...we will spend 24 hours with the world spinning in the opposite direction. Tomorrow...you will be able to replay all of yesterday. Would you say or do anything different? Would you try to make a difference? Think about it.
Everything stops

Music joins in with vocals
I don't think I'm ready...
I don't think I'm...

Standing alone
Away from home
With everything floating all around me

I cannot sleep
I've dug deep
But I cannot find where I'm supposed to be

Pre-chorus
I'm so gently washed away
Take me back to yester-day
I'm blind and water filled
My presentation's getting killed

Everything stops
By the...

Chorus
Strange thoughts running through my head
Everyone around me's bottle-fed
And I can't open up my mind
Because...I'm weak and approaching color-blind
I don't think I'm ready...
I don't think I'm...

Fearing the light
Of my own fight
I may be the only one who finds it hard

To...

Stand all alone
Away from home
There's a shadow in the courtyard

Pre-chorus
I could approach it quiet
But then I could scare it
What good will a shadow be
And yesterday beyond me

Chorus

Bridge

Chorus

Extro
I don't think I'm ready...
I don't think I'm ready...
I don't think I'm going
Take me back to yesterday

Everything stops again
Spoken
It's a decision you'll never get to make

[i]Final chord[i]

That about does it for that. Let me know...positive and negative crits. Before I forget...the music is very sporatic. There's 2 different time signatures...one for the verses and one for the pre and choruses. I don't know who to compare this to musically. It's still a work in progress though musically. This is just an idea for the lyrics. Get back to me. Cheers. (Haven't said that in a while.)
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