Here's one that really caught my eye.
Title is "dj/musician seeks manager"
Quote:
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music is like a puzzle you gotta have a talent to put notes or songs together......hypothetically say i had a gig djing on new years....... break by three days grace........poker face by lady gaga.............favorite disease by rev theory would be on my play list.........i like a dark, classy, mature(well somewhat mature it is a party...lol)crowd ............im very passionate about music always have been.........my chinese zodiac is the dragon.........that means im honest and brave i would expect you to be........i have nothing to lose only focused on music...........i dont wanna grow old being like that guy in that movie clerks working in the mall or deliverying pizza all my life..............
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I think this is a classic example of a bad ad. Not only is punctuation distracting, but it's hard to follow the train of thought in the first place. There's not a much mention of ideal qualities in a potential manager beyond "honest" (one would hope so) and "brave" (whatever that means). Absolutely zero discussion of business aspects. Instead, there is rambling about what an ideal gig would be, the Chinese zodiac, and sharing fear of a career in pizza delivery.
This is one of those ads where if I was a manager seeking clients and I saw it, I'd have no idea what was going on and move along down the chain.
Short version of this lesson: make sure if somebody reads your ad, the first reaction isn't "what the ****?"