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ATC · 11-07-2005, 05:43 PM

TojesDoLan- 9. It shows a lot of improvement. This has potential but its still a wee bit too straightforward for me.
RunAmokRampant - 4. Its still a wee bit clunky, but oh so elegant, and the last section is superawesome.
MMPR - 1 . Quite easily.
Dancin' Man - 10. It's a good attempt at rap, but it was way too choppy. I saw this on the S&L section. I'll try and do this in detail there. I'm trying to do something similar so it should be useful.

ps: dungeon/luncheon is the biggest no-no on the planet. You follow it up good for a bit after and lose it again.
Bowl of Oranges - 11. I did like this, but it just didnt have enough meat. The ending is awesome though and felt wasted on the topic.
SubtleDagger - 9. Eh.
Pixiesfanyo - 2 . I love this. Makes it sound deliciously vulgar.
ATC -
Silenceevolves - 8. Kid, your cigarette's on fire is an awesome line. That just did it for me.
xKonradx - 7. Dude, another one with a libretto feel. Or maybe I'm just thinking that because that was my assignment last week. I dont get the band reference, but its cool. I'd take out the Castor though. I don't know what that's a reference to.
Lowridenn - 6. I like this. I had to combat some ADD to get through it, but I liked it. Its got the libretto feel you were probably looking for.
Scared4Life - 5. Good job. The title doesn't do it for me, but the sections in italics and the verses are pure gold. Bridge/ending is a little off for me, but yea.
KeepingtheBlade - 3.
CrimsonPunk - 12

11-07-2005, 05:43 PM	#15
ATC Thru leaves,over bridges Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Vancouver, BC Posts: 6,731	TojesDoLan- 9. It shows a lot of improvement. This has potential but its still a wee bit too straightforward for me. RunAmokRampant - 4. Its still a wee bit clunky, but oh so elegant, and the last section is superawesome. MMPR - 1 . Quite easily. Dancin' Man - 10. It's a good attempt at rap, but it was way too choppy. I saw this on the S&L section. I'll try and do this in detail there. I'm trying to do something similar so it should be useful. ps: dungeon/luncheon is the biggest no-no on the planet. You follow it up good for a bit after and lose it again. Bowl of Oranges - 11. I did like this, but it just didnt have enough meat. The ending is awesome though and felt wasted on the topic. SubtleDagger - 9. Eh. Pixiesfanyo - 2 . I love this. Makes it sound deliciously vulgar. ATC - Silenceevolves - 8. Kid, your cigarette's on fire is an awesome line. That just did it for me. xKonradx - 7. Dude, another one with a libretto feel. Or maybe I'm just thinking that because that was my assignment last week. I dont get the band reference, but its cool. I'd take out the Castor though. I don't know what that's a reference to. Lowridenn - 6. I like this. I had to combat some ADD to get through it, but I liked it. Its got the libretto feel you were probably looking for. Scared4Life - 5. Good job. The title doesn't do it for me, but the sections in italics and the verses are pure gold. Bridge/ending is a little off for me, but yea. KeepingtheBlade - 3. CrimsonPunk - 12 Last edited by ATC; 11-07-2005 at 05:46 PM.