[RunAmokRampant]

TojesDolan 9th
You are an improving writer but still you need to open up a little more. You need to give more insight into what you're writing. I know that this may seem to be a hard thing to accomplish, but it's something that I believe that comes with time and practise and you're definitely on your way. Also I like your use of the challenge word in the line "Where the coldest stars wax along a shimmering burning moon.". Nice imagery.

MMPR 1st
I haven't seen you around much of late but this piece is pretty darned good. Well written and it gives off quite a soft tone. One of the best in this challenge.

Dancin' Man 10th
The structure kills this piece I think. The ideas that you're presenting are ok but it is written in an inconsistent manner. Next time put a little more effort structure-wise because what you write is decent.

Bowl of Oranges 13th
This is a bit bland. Need to spice it up and add a little bit of intrigue to this one. It just seems to lack vitality poetically.

SubtleDagger 6th
Not the most outstanding piece of work but its still an enjoyable piece and its a nice song. I've already commented on this and it does feel complete.

Pixiesfanyo 7th
Hmmm, there's some suspect imagery going on ("I sleep, wake and find wax dry on my chest"). You seem to use elegant language to describe something that's arguably vulgar and I must say you've done quite a convincing job.

ATC 3rd
Your title is amusing and this piece is weird. I like the interesting structure and you got some cool funky lines " want to teach my heart to beat in 13/16". It kind of reminds me of an earlier piece I had done ("three-lane") except this one is way more.. i dunno..... better in every way.

Silenceevolves 12th
I don't mind vague descriptive pieces but this feels a bit random and I really cannot connect with this on any level. This piece doesn't feel poetic at all. Just some words clunked together IMO. I mean the first verse I don't get that much but that's ok but the second verse doesn't feel linked.

xKonradx 5th
I actually liked this one. Simple yet effective, straight forward yet still had an amount of intrigue. A decent portrayal of Frankenstein. Could have spiced up the title a bit though as you make it a little too obvious in your intent but otherwise its pretty good.

Lowridenn 4th
Wow, is this a play or something. I had to read it a few times as its pretty fragmented. Not bad, it's different and I see a decent amount of effort went into this and it definitely has not gone to waste. Good show.

Scared4Life 2nd
I like this but a little variation possibly in the rhyme scheme would have made it a little more interesting. I also find that the ending was a bit anticlimatic. Don't know why but it doesn't feel complete but otherwise this was an enjoyable read.

KeepingtheBlade 8th
This was surprisingly good coming from a relatively new forum member. A decent first impression IMO. Still needs some tweaks in parts though and some of your expression is a bit strange.

CrimsonPunk 11th
This has a shocking opener. "I went to a mental hospital". Bland, bland, bland. You're supposed to start with something to instantly grab the reader's attention and this does the oppostie. Mind you, the rest of the piece was okay, not great but the first verse needs to be changed a lot.