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kitsch 06-30-2012 10:20 AM

inconsolable
 
pinch my nose right
b'tween my eyes
i've broke down crying
for the seventh time
"hey man, there's a quiet room off to the side"
"thanks, i just need to lie down"

puffy red eyes brow furrowed blindly whimpering like a child jaw shaking voice unsteadily falling its way down into cracked and broken syllables punctuated by sobs

NEEDTOPOST 06-30-2012 11:23 AM

this one's gonna make you a star

SugarCoatedSour 06-30-2012 11:42 AM

lacrimology's selling point

kitsch 06-30-2012 02:58 PM

it was a novel jot in the middle of a bout of remorse of loss of someone i loved

i feel so far away from this now, the contrast strikes me as comic

sugar, i had to google that

how do you know a seemingly endless supply of hyper-specialized words

SugarCoatedSour 06-30-2012 03:39 PM

some sort of unrealized long standing lineage of existence.

foreverendeared 07-04-2012 06:22 PM

[QUOTE=SugarCoatedSour;18904073]some sort of unrealized long standing lineage of existence.[/QUOTE]

lol

NEEDTOPOST 07-08-2012 10:32 PM

wtf that wasnt funny

witchxrapist 07-09-2012 02:16 AM

found it funny

NEEDTOPOST 07-09-2012 09:00 AM

no you didnt

SugarCoatedSour 07-09-2012 09:03 AM

you didn't post this. Your persona did.

NEEDTOPOST 07-09-2012 09:46 AM

nah that was straight up me

SugarCoatedSour 07-09-2012 10:55 AM

eh, I don't think so. Maybe you should really [B]think[/B] about it and let me know after.

NEEDTOPOST 07-10-2012 09:39 AM

says the dude who desperately wants to come off as the universe's third eye

SugarCoatedSour 07-10-2012 11:38 AM

you missed the boat young one. Your response has taken too long; made to gestate in the bile trap you call your mind.

mara 09-25-2012 07:39 AM

Short but nice

Blind 10-04-2012 01:14 PM

"puffy red eyes brow furrowed blindly whimpering like a child jaw shaking voice unsteadily falling its way down into cracked and broken syllables punctuated by sobs"

i really like this line. very stirring imagery

Captain North 10-08-2012 08:28 AM

Fuck oath man. I was kinda in that situation just today.

kitsch 10-08-2012 09:27 AM

'oath'?

Captain North 10-08-2012 09:31 AM

Aussie slang, sorry. Means fuck yeah basically

kitsch 10-08-2012 09:41 AM

Sweet. I like this looking back on it. I wrote it during the immediate aftermath of the breakup and during witbdrawal from opiate addiction, both of which had been a permanent fixture in my life for 2 years.

Thinking about converting this into lyrics.

Captain North 10-08-2012 09:46 AM

Only really the last line thing would need work for that, and even then not really

bringitlikeurmom 12-25-2012 12:57 AM

I like it

thetaoshum 01-07-2013 08:08 AM

This rules! I don't know why but I don't like the words "punctuated by sobs." It seems too well thought out. I would like a little bit more rawness in the end. You are still killing it Kitsch. Keep it up!

slipnslide 01-10-2013 12:06 AM

this thread is from august?!

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