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illska90 07-17-2011 02:43 PM

I need feedback please, if you'd be so kind :)
the album is already out but we're starting to record again as soon as we've rehearsed the new songs ... so any review of the mix, sound, song, lyrics or whatever comes to mind would be greatly aprecciated

http://soundcloud.com/danarbed/understanding-the-freedom-1


[B][U]Understanding the Freedom[/U][/B]

Understanding now how it is
I can and I will do whatever I please
Learning so much in a short amount of time
Going away these feelings that suffocate

Can't you see? Or more like “Can't you hear?”
I'm wide awake, though I may
not be here but I am someplace else,
Where you'll probably never see

Happiness tires me
I'm not afraid, but I am drained
I know my soul is deflated
I'll get some music and recharge it.
I am free to stay happy
Stay living, keep dying.
I could do anything
I'm free to do anything

Don't want what I need
Don't need what I want
I can see myself bleed
From poor decisions and circumstance

I'm so glad, I'm not sad, it isn't any fun
Goodbye stress I'll miss you less, than night misses the sun.
Learning to use and falling in love with freedom
I'm afraid when I open my eyes all this will be gone

It's all so easy now
'Cause I know exactly how...
Know what to say
Finding my way
There's only today
No fucking yesterday!

Introvertfl 08-15-2011 09:14 PM

Band Name: Introvert

Genre: Hip hop

Webpage: http://www.facebook.com/introvertfl

I'm a hip-hop artist out of Tampa, Florida

MyMentality 11-24-2011 05:50 PM

Band Name: Eyes Of Existence
Genre: Hardcore/Emo/Progressive
Link: http://www.facebook.com/pages/Eyes-of-Existence/107830879316000
Lyrics: This is a new song we've been working on, we're a pretty new band and this is for our first EP. The song is about a break-up between a couple who fell in love during school, and split apart during adulthood, pretty simple and pretty easy to relate to.

Link to acoustic version: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HWSplDJM2zA&feature=channel_video_title

[U][B]Eyes Of Existence - Lower The Glass, It's Cracked[/B][/U]

[Intro]
You said it was over,
You said it was your tears that filled up the cup,
And now that we're older,
The whiskey bottles empty so please let us bottle up.

I gave you a chance, I gave you one more chance!
But you threw that away like it's a...
Pointless piece of paper full of written scars,
And the paint won't fade away, like the pain inside my heart...

[Instrumental]

[Verse 1]
I was sat at the back, and you were sat at the front,
We were making gestures that our teacher couldn't bare to confront,
When I blow you a kiss, you'd trade me a smile,
And it gave me that funny feeling inside for a little while,

Now it's peeling my skin, right off of my back,
When you walked away and you never turned back!
Now you're grabbing my heart, and you tear it in half,
Oh you tear it in half, you're tearing me apart!

[Chorus]
So lower your glass, for the worst to come!
Lets drink ourselves to sleep, until the rise of the sun!
And if the glass is cracked, so is your head,
And if your heart ain't broke, don't fall in love instead...

Don't fall in love instead...

[Verse 2]
I remember at the party oh you looked like a mess,
Black ink bleeding from your eyes and dripping onto your dress,
You were screaming, you were shouting, you were so upset,
I couldn't bare to see you torn down and you looking like death,

Oh what, what, what, what, what, what, what went wrong?
When you br, br, br, br, br, br, broke down on the floor,
You said this was the last shot, the last shot for you, you, you and me!
So lets down our sorrows with the last of the whiskey,

[Chorus] (x2)
So lower your glass, for the worst to come!
Lets drink ourselves to sleep, until the rise of the sun!
And if the glass is cracked, so is your head,
And if your heart ain't broke, don't fall in love instead...

[Intro reprisal]

[Heavy instrumental]

[Chorus] (x2)
So lower your glass, for the worst to come!
Lets drink ourselves to sleep, until the rise of the sun!
And if the glass is cracked, so is your head,
And if your heart ain't broke, don't fall in love instead...

the666 11-28-2011 12:23 PM

omg, i had a listen and i like :) you lot could go far!

GlitchBoombox 02-05-2012 02:52 AM

[U]PLEASE HELP ME DEFINE THIS NEW GENRE OF MUSIC OF MINE, PUNK LO-FI GUITARS with BEATS[/U]

As a songwriter, music can only be comparable and acquired to fit your own taste, moods, and spirituality, and those human elements are not easily rationalised, I’ve been asked to define my music at times but really struggle. Can you guys help?????
Check out my new original song with clip that I posted 6 days ago, it features a very beautiful Aerialist, and hopefully it can inspire.

The link is, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1cDvuHn_hNg

Sorry you might have to copy and paste the URL or Search "Love the Way You Move By GLITCH BOOMBOX" in YOUTUBE which you can copy and paste as well, ha ha.

P.S It was sad to see book publishers suffer first before those record companies.

I have like 40 tracks written and soon they will be eventually released for free or kind donation, that’s cool I have a day job that I’m Okay with.

Truly inspired by those 60s Motown musicians with day jobs that absolutely killed the weekends with their NASTY KILLER TUNES...

Kind Regards, ALL the Best
Peps.

P.S What to you think of my lyrics
Thank-you.

Marcus Hobbs 02-28-2012 07:21 PM

I Love You.
 
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rpbvq5MAOJg

kitsch 03-02-2012 11:22 PM

[url]http://soundcloud.com/fragment61b[/url]

updated sounds! all of the tracks on here are official release tracks. these three will constitute the first half of my debut CD release on slays for days records. ( [url]http://slaysfordays.blogspot.com/p/label.html[/url] )

rolling... is the most recent, and the most palatable, but i recommend listening in order.

the cd will come out in about a month and a half to two months. you can mail order on slays for days, buy directly from me, or if you live in bloomington, both TD's CDs and LPs and Landlocked music have agreed to stock at least two copies of the release.

thanks for your support. thanks for listening. hope you like it.

Automatic Writing 05-14-2012 01:33 AM

Hey everyone, I was really proud of my lyrical efforts on my latest song (my 3rd ever recorded actually lol). If anyone likes it, I have 2 others on soundcloud.

http://soundcloud.com/joseph-flay/a-realization

iliek 05-29-2012 03:31 PM

Band name: BecomingAPoet
Genre: Progressive, alternative rock
Webpage/Myspace/Links to music: www.becomingapoet.com
Small description: fresh and young steak yet really lyrical, just released their first EP - Rising From Agony
Lyrics: everything's available on the homepage ^

Ataraktika 09-17-2012 10:00 AM

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YoYoMancuso 01-05-2013 05:38 PM

Not my band but a close friend of mine's. http://www.reverbnation.com/therelevantelephants

Band name: The Relevant Elephants

Genre: Funk/rock

jose1980 02-04-2013 10:30 PM

Useful tool for singer/songwriters
 
Hey everyone,

I've used this tool and mini recording studio with students, and I highly recommend it for singers who want to improve their vocal skills - particularly their range, pitch, intonation etc.

Cheers!

http://319b58yqplf91a-ls8vmt6p074.hop.clickbank.net/?tid=SINGORAMA

JordanVanc 02-06-2013 11:07 PM

This isn't my music, But i do know this girl and i think she deserves someone to critique her music :)

[B]Artist:[/B] Sam Mackey

[B]Genre:[/B] Indie HipHop

[B]Web Page:[/B] Youtube.com/SamMackeyMusic

This artist recently posted a full album all based on her struggle with drug addiction.
The whole album tells a story. And its only 20 min so its not too long that you get bored. It left me extremely impressed (cause lets be honest, an artists' first album is never that good) and it left me emotional. Its packed full with raw, personal and honest emotion in her lyrics.

I believe she deserves an honest critique :) So check her out if your interested in analyzing some new music. you wont be disappointed. I promise.
if you just go to the youtube link i left up top it will take you right to her full album.

Jordan

theforeigntones 02-12-2013 08:56 AM

The Foreign Tones
 
hi People, My friend and me have a new band, Here's our first song, "The Reason Why (The Foreign Tones)".
new songs coming soon!
we hope you enjoy it and PLEASE feedback :)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c2AzAzDqyTw

If you like it you can subscribe and like our facebook page for more songs

www.facebook.com/theforeigntones

Cheers

JordanVanc 02-19-2013 11:24 PM

SamMackey
 
I come across lots of new aspiring artist on youtube and i find it interesting to watch them grow. But i ran into one in particular who stood out. She recently released her first album and i was sceptical at first cause lets be honest, no ones first album is really all that good. But after listening to it i was extremely impressed with the raw, personal, and honest lyrics to her music. The album as a whole tells her story about her struggle with drug addiction.
I'm very interested to see what other people think of it...

[B]This link will take you right too her full album,[/B]

Youtube.com/SamMackeyMusic
or
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=10hLoj0B7bo

theforeigntones 03-03-2013 05:49 PM

this song called "Old Scores"

Feedbacks are very welcome

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SIZPAqXAI8Q

Thanks

CamGrovesfan 03-31-2013 02:54 PM

Would someone like to write some lyrics with me? :) or write a review with me?

ishotreaganband 05-15-2013 05:59 PM

I Shot Reagan
Punk
http://www.last.fm/music/I+shot+Reagan or facebook.com/ishotreagantwice
I play guitar and started this band a few months ago. we put a little ep out, and we are currently working on new material. I write all of the lyrics.

The frequency of the human race is white noise
and you can be broke or you can get deployed
the future is yours son to be enjoyed
and yes i know we fucked up
have some money sit down shut up
Life's a breeze weve got no problems
everything hard is already handled
yes it feels bad but looks so good
smile good friends of mine
have some money sit down shut up
you've got the cops but we've got the numbers
you've got guns but we'll never falter
we're not crawling we stand like men, your done, your done, your done
have some money sit down shut up
yes yes yes feels so good

I guess its about riots.
the first line, that is one of my favorite lines I have ever written.
Thanks for reading.

HillaryClitTounge 06-12-2013 10:25 PM

[quote] Understanding the Freedom

Understanding now how it is
I can and I will do whatever I please
Learning so much in a short amount of time
Going away these feelings that suffocate

Can't you see? Or more like “Can't you hear?”
I'm wide awake, though I may
not be here but I am someplace else,
Where you'll probably never see

Happiness tires me
I'm not afraid, but I am drained
I know my soul is deflated
I'll get some music and recharge it.
I am free to stay happy
Stay living, keep dying.
I could do anything
I'm free to do anything

Don't want what I need
Don't need what I want
I can see myself bleed
From poor decisions and circumstance

I'm so glad, I'm not sad, it isn't any fun
Goodbye stress I'll miss you less, than night misses the sun.
Learning to use and falling in love with freedom
I'm afraid when I open my eyes all this will be gone

It's all so easy now
'Cause I know exactly how...
Know what to say
Finding my way
There's only today
No fucking yesterday!
[/quote]

I thought this was dope,

HillaryClitTounge 06-12-2013 10:28 PM

@Reaganband

'[quote]The frequency of the human race is white noise
and you can be broke or you can get deployed
the future is yours son to be enjoyed
and yes i know we fucked up
have some money sit down shut up
Life's a breeze weve got no problems
everything hard is already handled
yes it feels bad but looks so good
smile good friends of mine
have some money sit down shut up [/quote]

^that was good


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