Be Long Upon the Earth Still

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[catharsis]

This is really phenomenal.

where nothing is
but nothing was ever so beautiful
as i saw it one day
in a field with clouds
passing through. i wish
i could say life is great
but i am food
writing these words on trees
to save them from wind

This makes the entire poem. The only part I might consider changing is the three "the"s in the third line. It makes for awkward reading. The rest is terrific.

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yeah i was thinking about taking the out. hey the spacing on mx sucks, but check the original spacing out and let me know if u think it adds to the words or it should just be spaced as is.

http://www.sendspace.com/file/yc3ar6
in pdf

[RichRman]

I think the original spacing in the pdf is much better than the spacing on here.

The only part I really didnt like was
"and everyone
longing to have asses like diamonds"
It just came off a bit crude despite the comparison to something quite fair. The continuing simile I think strayed too much from the connection to nature you have for most of the poem, I think it just shatters the sort of majesty and grace of the poem.
That was how I took it but others may well disagree (strongly) with me.