Smith-Corona 1926 For Sale

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[lwatkins]

what the f88k in the name of all that is holy was that

did you enjoy it?
is it modern art?
is it a pile of time wasting rubbish? - absolutely

shocking...

theres a time and a place my friend... not here!

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[lwatkins]

4 of the 6 words in that sentence apply. the last 2 don't

[Magnus55]

Haha that was great.

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[kitsch]

this wasnt that bad guys

pretentious as all hell
but really
L=A=N=G=U=A=G=E
is kinda ghey
and really easy to do

not bad for what it is tho

[lwatkins]

ok, look.

i agree as an art-form - its great, I infact like it

but... "Songwriting and Lyrics??"

i don't think so.

[kitsch]

we here at s&l are so arty and indie and faggoty that we have evolved beyond simple songwriting and lyrics.

if someone wants to branch out, this is the best place to do it

plus, just look at the lyrics in the ok computer album insert
they do it all ghey like dis

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[kitsch]

i mean i dont care for this style
i think its a tad pretentious

well ee cummings is cool and all
but your piece was too abstract
there was too much asdlkfjort
kinda ****
and less meat to the poem
there wasnt a real underlying theme
and it didnt pack the confused emotional "oophf"
i think you were going for
it just seemed out there
and being out there
just for out there's sake
is just out there, man

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[kitsch]

mebe becuz it was so "random" and creative

man, ive studied poetry
all kinds
the douches with degrees taught me their regurgitated analysis bullsh'it
if i cant make sense of it
i doubt anyone else on this forum can

if its not poetry
just a collection of words
(which a lot of poems are anyway)
then it has no meaning
there are better ways to conjure up cognitive dissonance

[huxtaposition]

I think that was fantastic.

".hellow my name is dkrthhdmisntheend"

Hello my name is -blahblah-the end. I liked that.

"i am the winning est animal"

I liked that too. Most winning animal.

Don't get the title but I am not gonna look too into it right now. Those two things jumped out at me. All in all I didn't think it was too meaty, no.

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[catharsis]

Pretty sophomoric.

[TojesDolan]

i like it

but it's kind of pretentious though

[kitsch]

alright i added one more thing: "nobody is present at the birth of their thoughts" fragmented down the body of the poem. the poem's title is smith-corona 1926 for sale because a smith corona is a typewriter that i found in a typewriter shop that had paper in the writer on which people tested out the typewriter by typing most of what you see in the "poem." i added a couple lines, including those words, but this is basically a "poem" by me and several other people. its technical name is a "found" poem. you may not want to call it a poem, that's fine, it doesnt have to be one! its merely an assortment of words. you can still enjoy it, resist classification and gradations. there's certainly meaning to be extracted from a piece like this and it can be just as beautiful in my opinion as shakespeares sonnets. the cognitive dissonance takes on new dimensions when you start to consider authorship, poem entity. what is a poem like this saying about today, right now? maybe its indicative of something. i have merely framed it for you. how do you approach something like this is what we should be thinking about. its not worthless. i was touched by the fragments of peoples minds that found their way onto a sample testing sheet in a typewriter in a store.



i didnt write this; WE wrote this!


thats a certainly interesting premise, the stuff that is typed here seems unlikely.
even so, the poem is meaningless without knowing how it came into existence.
if you just read it, its really pretentious.

[Surf]

so basically dada

except duchamps principle in dada relied on people's prior conception of what the thing was. e.g. the urinal. people knew it was just a urinal, it was the context in which it was presented that challenged the idea of art etc etc.

posting it here is one step towards that idea, but I think it needs more of a framing device.

you might need to make it more apparent of the idea behind it. not sure how really. maybe just

found typed on an old typewriter in a shop

at the bottom or something.

I like the idea, but the execution needs work.

[kitsch]

^^ya no one knows wtf a 1926 smith-corona is

[lwatkins]

SONGWRITING AND LYRICS PEOPLE!!

HOW COULD THIS POSSIBLY BE A SONG!! YOU CAN'T SING IT, IT WOULDNT FIT OVER MUSIC!!

as a peice of cognitive expression - i agree its pretty cool

but it isnt a song!!! AS THE FORUM SUGGESTS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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[Surf]

I can see what you're saying about the idea; there's good grounds there for it to work. But what you're trying, and I'm assuming this is heavily Duchamp influenced, isn't quite working.

the found art worked because it was placed in a gallery setting, where people would question whether it was actually art or the setting that made it so.

In terms of this piece, an equal setting needs to be found. Without the setting, the the audience doesn't really appreciate it to the full extent.

The title is probably the easiest place to work with this. Or even a sub title. But yeah, like I said before. I like the idea, but its needs a new context in which it can fully function.

[lwatkins]

i agree with surf

this would be great if hung in a gallery - i personally really like it for that reason.

but in context, its not the right place here :)

[kitsch]

who cares?
the mods deleted my posts directing that maxwell guy to audio arena

i think that its pretty much anything goes

[lwatkins]

hmmmmm...

that's just stupid

I'll take a photo of my shin and put it on here. It expresses deep emotion and feelings of awe and sensibility... (hmmmmm)

[catharsis]

hmmmmm...

that's just stupid

I'll take a photo of my shin and put it on here. It expresses deep emotion and feelings of awe and sensibility... (hmmmmm)I really dislike this argument that people like to use against any kind of art. Yes, granted, I'm sure you believe that some forms of art are stupid and easy to replicate with the pretense that it's imitation and not really art. That certainly doesn't mean that you can point at a picture that is seemingly so and say "HEY, THAT'S NOT ART."

In fact, I don't think anyone is really RIGHT when it comes to expression in any form. It is what it is, and not what you think it isn't.

[lwatkins]

I agree! I love art; and I'm fine with modern art.

This is not the place for it though is it.

[kitsch]

I really dislike this argument that people like to use against any kind of art. Yes, granted, I'm sure you believe that some forms of art are stupid and easy to replicate with the pretense that it's imitation and not really art. That certainly doesn't mean that you can point at a picture that is seemingly so and say "HEY, THAT'S NOT ART."

In fact, I don't think anyone is really RIGHT when it comes to expression in any form. It is what it is, and not what you think it isn't.

its called kitsch man