You're a disease

[sho0oo]

hhh

[lwatkins]

great wording - i like, but, i reckon its almost a bit cheesey to use the 'f' word so often - the odd one in a song here and there...

i know its meant to be angry but...

[Hunted By a Freak]

lot of "I" statements you got there buddy

[sho0oo]

revised:

It makes no sense I know,
But I can't stop the feeling
Whenever I'm alone,
For some reason I can't stop standing on the ceiling

I want your body, to be all mine
I know its wrong but, it is ****in' with my mind
Jealous tendencies, tearin' me apart inside
Can't suppress these, virile thoughts

Well You're a disease...
And so am I.

Im digging through your side,
while you are digging into mine.
your minds so ****ing clear
while my ears cant hear your quiet love

I want all your bodies, to be all my mind
I know its wrong but, I feel jealous all the time
I cant stop the feeling from permeating inside
Can't suppress these murderous thoughts

Well, you're a disease
And so am I

I know I ****ed a girl or two
Doesn't mean that I can't control you
I can't justify it but I can't seem to see the light
You have infected my intuitive sight

I want your body, to be all mine
I know its wrong but, it is ****in' with my mind
Jealous tendencies, tearin' me apart inside
Can't suppress these, virile thoughts

Well You're a disease...
And so am I.

[DeathMagnetik]

theres no poem there

:confused:

[Iscariot]

revised:

It makes no sense I know,
But I can't stop the feeling
Whenever I'm alone,
For some reason I can't stop standing on the ceiling

I want your body, to be all mine
I know its wrong but, it is ****in' with my mind
Jealous tendencies, tearin' me apart inside
Can't suppress these, virile thoughts

Well You're a disease...
And so am I.

Im digging through your side,
while you are digging into mine.
your minds so ****ing clear
while my ears cant hear your quiet love

I want all your bodies, to be all my mind
I know its wrong but, I feel jealous all the time
I cant stop the feeling from permeating inside
Can't suppress these murderous thoughts

Well, you're a disease
And so am I

I know I ****ed a girl or two
Doesn't mean that I can't control you
I can't justify it but I can't seem to see the light
You have infected my intuitive sight

I want your body, to be all mine
I know its wrong but, it is ****in' with my mind
Jealous tendencies, tearin' me apart inside
Can't suppress these, virile thoughts

Well You're a disease...
And so am I.

assuming you're still in high school, are you failing english/creative writing?

[kitsch]

assuming you're still in high school, are you failing english/creative writing?

god i hope he's still in grade school

[sho0oo]

im actually 19. i fail english and creative writing a lot. I love to write songs and make music. It is my ultimate passion.
I thank you graciously for your honesty.

[curseworship]

Just keep writing man, it only gets better with time. Good luck with your future writing and post with improvement!

[Iscariot]

i fail english and creative writing a lot.

maybe you don't understand how this can directly conflict with this..

I love to write songs and make music. It is my ultimate passion.

[sho0oo]

It gets in the way yeah, but ill keep trying