the struggle

[knowndebaser1]

just posted a song on the myspace. would be nice if someone or some of you could review it and tell we what you think. thanks in advance.

http://www.myspace.com/raycarroll444

[Magnus55]

Interesting. Very interesting. I like it for what it is.

It makes me think of what musical collab between eminem and Tom Delongue (Blink 182 guitarist) would sound like.

My critisism would be the vocals. The human ear is trained to hear voices; it's the first thing most listeners hear about a song. Not the instruments, not the drums-- the vocals. So when you are doing vocal harmonies, is it needs to be spot on otherwise it becomes very apparent to the listener that there is discord. It's kinda neat how you have the voices singing in a minor tune to create... anxiety to match the music, but there are some points where the rhythm of the vocals are off, and one voice will go off either a little too sharp or a little too flat and it stands out. It's much more aparent in your next song "bang".

Conceptually it's a neat piece, there are just some minor mechanical problems with it.

[knowndebaser1]

thank you for taking the time to listen and review. i also noticed the differences in the vocal pitches, im goning togo over it and try to match them up later on today. i re did the vocals atleast 10 times and i just couldn't get them to match up,lol. this take here is the closest i was able to get them that day. it is more difficult then i thought to be able to match them up without going out of key. and im typically not a singer, hopefully in time it will be easier and i can develope a better ear for pointing the dissonace.

yeah the second song is completely out to. i didnt spend that much time on that rack but im starting to with current projects. recording and mixing jsut doesnt come naturally,anyways for me it doesn't.

[GorgeousGabe]

you get better and better the more you do it. a lot of it is about proper breathing, and where you sing from. sing from deep down. from your soul. no I'm not talking about that- I mean your diaphragm