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Greenblink
05-20-2008, 12:18 PM
Dear you, let's remember happier days
When you would slit your wrists for money
And sleep with strangers to release the pain
That bottled up inside you
Like the gas you tried to escape
By jumping out the seventh story window
But it was too late
You had already arrived at your destination
Where all those years of pain and frustration
Just seemed like a big ****ing waste

You lied there on the concrete
Blood running from your head
I kissed you
Alive or dead
Our love could've been either or
But now it's like I've realized what I'm living for

The sweetest things in life
Aren't always what they're cracked up to be
It's like winning the lottery the day that you die
Or falling in love like I did

We broke it off on our wedding day
I drowned in the tears
As my eyes started to decay
I ran into the bathroom
Locked all the doors
Face down in the bathtub
Is where you found me
Just like I found you before

You held my hand
But there was no pulse
That's when you realized
That you were in love
Maybe this is god's plan
Is this fate?
Either way you're just a little too late

The sweetest things in life
Aren't always what they're cracked up to be
It's like winning the lottery the day that you die
Or falling in love like I did

Our names are written on the ceiling
In blood with love, with love
Our names are written there together
Etched in stone forever
In blood with love, in blood, with love
In blood, with love

The sweetest things in life
Aren't always what they're cracked up to be
It's like winning the lottery the day that you die
Or falling in love like I did

The sweetest things in life
Aren't always what they're cracked up to be
It's like winning the lottery the day that you die
Or falling in love like I did

AllBoutTheBenjamins
05-20-2008, 10:21 PM
Its well written, but the content reaks of cliches. I'm pretty sure you have some subconsious plagurism going on here too. Some of these lines seem so familar.

"I kissed you like I meant it"

thats in a dashboard song fa sho.

That last stanza is kick *** though. Best part of the song. (least cliche as well)

Greenblink
05-20-2008, 11:26 PM
cut out the "kissed you like i meant it" part, i was aware of the dashboard lyric but now that's totally obvious i figured it'd be best to get rid of it. Thanks :)