here's a new one

[damselsindistress]

You don’t have no feelings
I tried to tell you
But you wouldn’t listen
I fell down back there
I felt for your hand
Man what a drag
I skinned my knees
You don’t have no feelings
I tried to tell you
But you wouldn’t agree

Now would you help me off my feet
Would you help me off my feet? (x2)

Comments and suggestions are welcome. Thanks

[\m/-CHeV-\m/]

I'm not sure what you're trying to tell us here.

anyway, You don’t have no feelings soudn too 'street' to me for somethign like this. mayeb change it to you don't have any feelings. also 'man what a drag' seemed kinda awkward?

anyway, i won't say it's weak, but man, you're just summing up clichés =/. sorry, but i didn't really like it.

[tonybrown]

the seems to be a circular motion that just doesnt finish with them lyrics

try this one

you have no feelings left
i tried to make you understand
i tried to show you how to feel
i tried to take you by the hand
you have no feelings left
i wanted to just show you how
the feelings that we could have had
being together somehow

[HighandDriving]

You're using too many I's.