Put Your Smile On (No One Will Know)

[El_Goodo]

Put Your Smile On (No One Will Know)

You say you've been beaten battered and thrown around,
You've been lifted up just to be dropped down,
You've been homeless wandering from town to town,
You say you lost yourself and you have not been found,
Your lifeless and you feel you've lost your soul,
Just don't forget to put on your smile,
And no one will know

You tell me that your cry yourself to sleep,
That you only take the lovers you can't keep,
That you're a starving wolf in a herd of sheep,
You would escape if the mountain wasn't so steep,
You say you're only half alive and its starting to show,
Just put on your smile every morning,
And no one will know

I heard you say you've grown to love the feel of pain,
It reassures you that you still are sane,
You stare death in the eyes you know you can't die again,
You're just a shade of gray on an artist's plain,
You wish to be buried beneath the snow,
But you just put on your smile,
So that no one will know

Don't tell me what you think I want to hear,
I am one of the few things you need not fear,
Don't dress up your words just say it clear,
I did not come to fill up on your tears,
Just tell me everything delicate and slow,
Then put your smile back on,
And only I will I know

http://youtube.com/watch?v=eikXrNTyCJM

[Nightvision]

I don't know what to make of this (I've not watched the video as I'm at work). It's well enough written, and to be honest, it's of a decent enough quality that you could probably sell this to the right person with a few revisions. (Your rhyming is a bit ugly in places, particularly pain/sane, which made me wince.)

On the flipside, this felt very empty and unemotive. Your choice of words, whilst adequate and correct, didn't paint any pictures in my mind. A little imagery can go a long way in a piece like this - you don't have to go way over the top or anything, but just be a little more creative and make the reader/listener think a bit more.

Overall:
not bad, and well enough written for the most part, but you need to tidy up some rough edges and try to avoid telling the reader everything instead of showing them.