Sun Zoo
01-07-2008, 05:35 PM
a.k.a. song I don't have a title for yet. I'm a rapper, doing this song with a singer-songwriter, and I'm waiting to get her lyrics in response to this and then we'll tweak and add from there. This is obviously unedited and unfinished (it's just the first verse) but I'm bored and figured I'd see what people here say.
(keep in mind this is a rap verse....i know it might be too much rhyming for some of you, but for it to sound good it needs to rhyme a lot, and it also needs to be multisyllable rhymes)
I can't remember her name, it was such a long time ago
and we were young, still kids just trying to grow
homework and recess with time to blow
to tell the truth, them middle school days went kinda slow
and the right kind of clothes, I didn't have them
i used to put on pants somedays and wonder what was gonna happen
and who would be the first kid to come asking,
laughing, if i was trying to start a new fashion
I wouldn't have it, knew that I couldn't be cool
but if I was a loser I couldn't put up with school
but I knew a loser, knew a couple in fact
but one girl really always seemed to suffer attacks
I didn't know much, but knew I didn't want to be that
kids used to laugh at her, mocking her blubbery fat
how every day in gym class she would run in the back
all by herself, her eyes tearing up on the track
I didn't really know her, but they said she was lame
and they turned mocking her to an event or a game
i just want them to remember my name, and ****,
most of the time they don't really care whatever I say
but if I called her ugly, called her stupid, or fat
then looked at them hopefully they would usually laugh
and she would sigh quiet, put her eyes down and walk away
and i would sigh quiet knowing they'd be off me for the day
distracted by abusing her, mocking her, using her, laughing behind her back
and in her face, she never minded that
at least she was always quiet and polite
probably thought sooner or later we'd have to see the light
but we never did, I left after the eighth grade
and the three years I knew her all treated her the same way
Ostracized with no friends for no reason
the one target, the 24-7 open season
And I don't know how it turned out, maybe she's fine
brushed it off and grew up, and created a life
or maybe she's depressed, or maybe she's dead
I don't know, and I don't see the point of taking a guess
Cause in my head, she's still a thirteen year old girl
with tears inside, pleading with kids to give her a try
had to be lonely, but nobody would know
becuase we treated her like we didn't know she had a soul.
oh, also, we'll be in the studio recording this on friday, so....if you see something desperately wrong with it, respond fast, lol.
(keep in mind this is a rap verse....i know it might be too much rhyming for some of you, but for it to sound good it needs to rhyme a lot, and it also needs to be multisyllable rhymes)
I can't remember her name, it was such a long time ago
and we were young, still kids just trying to grow
homework and recess with time to blow
to tell the truth, them middle school days went kinda slow
and the right kind of clothes, I didn't have them
i used to put on pants somedays and wonder what was gonna happen
and who would be the first kid to come asking,
laughing, if i was trying to start a new fashion
I wouldn't have it, knew that I couldn't be cool
but if I was a loser I couldn't put up with school
but I knew a loser, knew a couple in fact
but one girl really always seemed to suffer attacks
I didn't know much, but knew I didn't want to be that
kids used to laugh at her, mocking her blubbery fat
how every day in gym class she would run in the back
all by herself, her eyes tearing up on the track
I didn't really know her, but they said she was lame
and they turned mocking her to an event or a game
i just want them to remember my name, and ****,
most of the time they don't really care whatever I say
but if I called her ugly, called her stupid, or fat
then looked at them hopefully they would usually laugh
and she would sigh quiet, put her eyes down and walk away
and i would sigh quiet knowing they'd be off me for the day
distracted by abusing her, mocking her, using her, laughing behind her back
and in her face, she never minded that
at least she was always quiet and polite
probably thought sooner or later we'd have to see the light
but we never did, I left after the eighth grade
and the three years I knew her all treated her the same way
Ostracized with no friends for no reason
the one target, the 24-7 open season
And I don't know how it turned out, maybe she's fine
brushed it off and grew up, and created a life
or maybe she's depressed, or maybe she's dead
I don't know, and I don't see the point of taking a guess
Cause in my head, she's still a thirteen year old girl
with tears inside, pleading with kids to give her a try
had to be lonely, but nobody would know
becuase we treated her like we didn't know she had a soul.
oh, also, we'll be in the studio recording this on friday, so....if you see something desperately wrong with it, respond fast, lol.