I'm wearing the same pants I wore last fall.

[i am the robots]

Fast forward just one year
And still, she's in my blood
Still all the things I think
Come crawling back to her
I'm holding on to hope
Begging for a final reprieve
And still all my dreams
Are ****ing based on her
I'm holding on to memories
My sanity is like
Sand right through my fingers
And still every night
My only thoughts are of her
It's some kind of disease
That I will never sweat out
My heart still is beating
But is there any use?

Based off of something I wrote before, KIND OF an edit to make a song fit how I feel now.

[camdizzle]

This isn't that long, and you still managed to say "your thoughts go back to her," in basically the same way, three separate times. I understand that's the point of this, but I feel like you can say the same thing without explicitly stating it. Otherwise it just feels repetitive.

[asomata]

Some of the imagery is cliche, but (if meant for a song) an emotional delivery would really drive it home, and it should work.

[Surtr]

^^ Pretty much that.

Also I'm wearing the same pants I wore yesterday. Actual truth lol.

[i am the robots]

This isn't that long, and you still managed to say "your thoughts go back to her," in basically the same way, three separate times. I understand that's the point of this, but I feel like you can say the same thing without explicitly stating it. Otherwise it just feels repetitive.

Well it's for the outro of the full piece, here's the full thing:
/sikk All Shall Perish type tech intro
Ugggghhhhhhhhh (low growl)
Breeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee (pig squeel)
Aaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh (high scream)
/sikk groove part
A child is crying
The sun went down tonight
It was a peaceful death
Yet still we mourn this loss (low growls)
Our hopes, our expectations (high skramz)
Are buried under foot (mid range skramz)
Our dreams, our aspirations (mid range skramz fading to high scramz)
Are crushed in the rising tide (high skramz)
/sikk breakdown
Words are duality incarnate
A knife, the shoulder of a lover (mid skramz)
Words are duality inarnate (mid scramz to high scramz to low growls)
A knife, the shoulder of a lover (low growls) (this part repeats like 4 more times and I just keep going lower and lower LOL)
/sikk tremolo picked part
Palest figure, in my peripheral
Enchanting orbs, blackened hazel
Threads of ebon night
Braided pink and gold
Coral perfection, breathing lies untold (high skramz)
/sikk black dahlia murder type melodic part
And so it seems it's all for not
My ship's lost out to sea
The unwanted captain
Waiting for the tide to receed
To take my treasures from the depths
Rescue passion from the hull
My hands are clasped and I'm waiting for the tide to break (high skramz)
/sikk melodic part like darkest hour
:lyrics at the top of this page: (high skramz)
/siklk outro breakdown