The Fires Of Chimera

[DeadReligion]

The Fires Of Chimera

The sun comes up again and I am still awake.
Looking upon the makings of another day.
Clashing blades spin widdershins against the burning sun.

A bittersweet rebellion rages
Outside.
Sure to fade and die,
Like all others.
I go outside brandishing my
Sword.
I go out with the knowledge
I will die.

The moon comes up and it subtly lights the
Footprints encased in bloody mud on the battleground.
Waiting, my back is against a tree.

When the men with guns
Come
We are sure to die
Like all the others
I go outside my cover brandishing my
Sword.
I go out with the knowledge
I will die.

I am another unknown soldier whose embers
Burn forever like the Fires Of Chimera
On the funeral pyre of rebellion.

I am sure the Field of Mars will miss me.
But I will only miss the freedom for which
I fought. I’m another victim of a delusory vision.

[asomata]

The sun comes up again and I am still awake.
Looking upon the makings of another day.
Clashing blades spin widdershins against the burning sun.

I like this. Strong 3rd line, although I did have to google 'widdershins'

A bittersweet rebellion rages
Outside.
Sure to fade and die,
Like all others.
I go outside brandishing my
Sword.
I go out with the knowledge
I will die.

'The sun comes up again and I am still awake...' leads me to believe he's been fighting all night, but then the next stanza is all about him being indoors and then deciding to go out and fight. It's not really a problem per se, but something you might want to be aware of.

I like the term 'Bittersweet rebellion.'

Beyond that, I don't dig the flow of the second stanza, with the funky line-breaks. It seems like it can be effective for the 1st and last lines of the stanza, but 'sure to fade and die..' to 'sword' just sound clunky to me. I get that it's for the repetition in a little bit (where it does work a little better) but it still feels awkward to me.

The moon comes up and it subtly lights the
Footprints encased in bloody mud on the battleground.
Waiting, my back is against a tree.

Sets a stage just like the first three lines. Good. It seems calmer than the beginning though, just because there is no description of fighting here.

When the men with guns
Come
We are sure to die
Like all the others
I go outside my cover brandishing my
Sword.
I go out with the knowledge
I will die.

The flow here is still awkward at 'brandishing' but it is improved from the similar stanza before.

I am another unknown soldier whose embers
Burn forever like the Fires Of Chimera
On the funeral pyre of rebellion.

I am sure the Field of Mars will miss me.
But I will only miss the freedom for which
I fought. I’m another victim of a delusory vision

Both of these sound solid, though I am unaware of what the 'Fires of Chimera' and 'Field of Mars' are. I am assuming this song is part of a larger story or setting?

Last stanza is my favorite of the song, a solid part to go out on , finally showing the motives for fighting in the beginning.

[DeadReligion]

Fires Of Chimera are a name of eternal flames that are in Olympos National park, in Turkey. Field of Mars was a field where Roman soldiers used to train. Thanks for the crit.