connect, disconnect, connect. no, disconnect.

[bowl of oranges]

you and i
we live in a world.
a very different world,
but merely different
through perception.

i percieve, you percieve
we all percieve.

i percieve you to be living disconnected.
your hands aren't on the wheel,
you're not holding the gun,
you've run out of petroleum,
your feet are on ice,

you
lack
control.

but put it however you want it.
i'll just put it as a disconnect.

so

we don't connect.


29/12/2007 mw

[DeadReligion]

The title is horrible. However this has a nice idea (which I'd develop a LITTLE bit more). Also, may a little imagery? Other than that, its a nice piece.

[bowl of oranges]

This was all about being stripped down and bare.

The title is supposed to be jerky, indecisive, unable to deliver. Maybe not trying to be horrible though.

Thanks for your thoughts.

[Surtr]

The title is horrible. However this has a nice idea (which I'd develop a LITTLE bit more). Also, may a little imagery? Other than that, its a nice piece.

Agreed. Like 100%.

The title is horrible, it doesn't provide anything bare, it just makes you wanna' not read it.

The idea has nothing to it really, and it really doesn't flow, and I'm aware of your idea behind it, but it doesn't work, it just pisses you off and makes you wanna' close the thread.

[bowl of oranges]

haha. cool.