First demo for my first album

[jxeboy]

Im working really hard on writing a lot of material to make my first album, and I finally did a quick demo of one of the songs. Its a really rough demo, and it only has one verse worth of lyrics, but I am curious to see what people think of it, So comments are very welcome. The song is called "cut short" and can be found here

http://www.myspace.com/callingyou478

Thanks for the feedback

~Jake

[atarisrock55]

I liked the guitar parts...the vocals were kind of forgettable, they were kind of quiet I guess....maybe if you made them louder?