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JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 02:17 AM
Correct my review k plz thx.

what I don't want are any words or sentences changed. even if you think they sound funny or don't quite fit. nor do i want short sentences extended with commas, etc...thats how i talk and i write like i talk. but if you see anything missing such as commas, apostrophes, etc....feel free to go nuts. thanks once again.


Its hard to believe Trent Reznor has been doing this nealy 20 years. Between NIN's first full length release in 1989 (Pretty Hate Machine), numerous albums of odds and ends and recorded live performances, and the explosion of the now classic "The Downward Spiral" LP which road in on the commercial wave of the "new music" onslaught which started with grunge here in America, Reznor has dazzled us with his musical brilliance, annoyed us with his angst, surprised us with his humanity, shocked us with his dark vision, and some would say disappointed with the lean and somewhat uninspired (to the ears of some listeners, at least) "With Teeth" album. Not a bad album, but coming nearly six years after the commercially under performing and hard to digest double disc "The Fragile" many were hoping for something with a bit more imagination and bite. "Year Zero", for loyal and casual fans alike, delivers that bite.

Perhaps recognizing the amount of time he takes between full original releases (typically five years since TDS) along with his dark genius reputation raises expectations for greatness beyond reason, Reznor wasted no time in bringing Year Zero to the masses. Coming just two years after the release of With Teeth Reznor has called the album a work of "inspiration" that fell into place out of some doodling on a laptop. Doodling led to an idea, an idea turned into framework for songs, and both finally came together as a total work. Easier said then done? Perhaps. But on Year Zero it sounds as natural as waking up in the morning.

While Reznor has had no problem alienating a listener or two in the past, on Year Zero its obvious from the beginning he wants to draw those same listeners in from the start. From the martial drum intro that begins the brief album opener "HYPERPOWER" to the "My Sharona" like drum intro of "The Beginning Of The End" the record grabs you from the start and simply never lets go. All of Reznor's tried and true tricks are on display from the start from his rock god guitar roar to his electronica synth droning to the solid thump and thwack of his industrial inspired percussion, all delivered with the painstaking precision we have come to expect from the NIN team. And also with heart and close attention to texture and conventional songwriting structure, which in the past has been put on the back burner in favor of hit and miss experimentation and careening blind rage.

The first half of Year Zero is clearly crafted to draw you into its world with an emphasis on hooks and even a funky vibe (not to say funk, per se) not found on a NIN album since perhaps The Downward Spiral. The groove of songs like "The Good Soldier" with its cool electronic soulfulness never gives way to a whisper to a scream style rage one might expect and instead holds its steady groove throughout before flowing into the next track, the industrial chant of "Vessel" which while harder in tone and rife with the sort of electronic noise Reznor is known for maintains itself very well throughout, never digressing from its set pattern or musical theme. It simply pulls you in and keeps you in. And in you remain, never with a thought of "what the hell is this" or an inkling to hit the skip button from hearing it all before. This is interesting music as is the usual from this artist, but it is also vastly entertaining and not at all alienating. Indeed rather then repulse on Year Zero Reznor seeks to attract and seduce you into his vision, and he succeeds on any and all levels.

Having drawn you in with the strong rock hook and setting up a nice groove on the first half of the album, the rest of the going here is much the same as Reznor relaxes into what seems familiar but newly tailored clothing for the rest of the proceedings, giving us dark electronica such as the apocalyptic "The Warning" and the aggressive funky chant of the buoyant "God Given". In fact this may be the first NIN album since The Downward Spiral that inspires not just visions of a dark place and time (emotional and otherwise) but also strong visions of some creative dance oriented remixes geared toward the dark underbelly of after hours clubs everywhere. Perhaps from his time spent with Bowie in the late '90's or simply by recalling his own long ago inspirations, Reznor's sense of groove and style (yes, he has one) is in full effect on Year Zero, and it makes for a full, richly textured, and ultimately uniform listening experience we can not only enjoy upon several listenings but one that will grow after many more, as well.

Perhaps the fact this is a "concept" album set in a dark not so distant future helped Reznor loosen up a little. And while usually bringing what is inside to the outside, on Year Zero Reznor instead looks outside, brings it in, and spits it out not based on his own feelings, but as a thing unto itself, therefore freeing himself of the whiny torture that has plagued some NIN recordings and freeing the listener to make whatever they damn well please of it. In fact to even mention this is a concept album and according to Reznor the first half of a larger whole is besides the point, as most fans and listeners will hardly care or notice. Make no mistake this is NIN as usual, but its an effortless, inspired, and unaffected Trent Reznor the likes of which we may not have had the pleasure of knowing for almost a decade and a half. And Year Zero has the sound of year one all over again. Or at least 1994. And its no doubt all the better for it.

Wish
04-10-2007, 05:39 AM
Commas/periods go before the last quotation mark. Things like "Year Zero", would become "Year Zero,"

You have a few "Its" here and there as well.

angry armadillo
04-10-2007, 05:51 AM
the brief is well too confusing, im not sure if im meant to leave anything or not, but the first word should be it's not its :P

Eliminator
04-10-2007, 05:56 AM
anal hehe

JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 09:11 AM
^ lol

thanks dudes you have saved my review!

The Jungler
04-10-2007, 11:11 AM
Its hard to believe Trent Reznor has been doing this nealy 20 years. Between NIN's first full length release in 1989 (Pretty Hate Machine), numerous albums of odds and ends and recorded live performances, and the explosion of the now classic "The Downward Spiral" LP which road in on the commercial wave of the "new music" onslaught which started with grunge here in America, Reznor has dazzled us with his musical brilliance, annoyed us with his angst, surprised us with his humanity, shocked us with his dark vision, and some would say disappointed with the lean and somewhat uninspired (to the ears of some listeners, at least) "With Teeth" album.break this one gigantour sentence into a few smaller ones.

good review though

JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 11:20 AM
thanks for that you know i didn't even notice it

JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 11:42 AM
ok i did this to it. i'm just not sure if it reads better or not. however it is shorter. and i tried breaking up the sentence as is but couldn't do it without some editing out:


It's hard to believe Trent Reznor has been doing this nealy 20 years. Between NIN's first full length release in 1989 (Pretty Hate Machine), numerous albums of odds and ends and live performances, and the explosion of the now classic "The Downward Spiral" LP, Reznor has dazzled us with his musical brilliance, annoyed us with his angst, surprised us with his humanity, and shocked us with his dark vision. And some would say disappointed us with his lean and somewhat uninspired (to the ears of some listeners, at least) last effort "With Teeth."

i don't like it as much :(

are big sentences a no-no in an absolute way or just considered that by some?


EDIT: ok i shortened it by taking out the "grunge" reference but didn't add any periods anywhere.


EDIT 2: ok now i did this to it:

It's hard to believe Trent Reznor has been doing this nearly 20 years. Between NIN's first full length release in 1989 (Pretty Hate Machine), numerous albums of odds and ends and live performances, and the explosion of the now classic "The Downward Spiral" LP, Reznor has dazzled us with his musical brilliance, annoyed us with his angst, surprised us with his humanity, and shocked us with his dark vision. And some would say he also disappointed with the lean and somewhat uninspired (to the ears of some listeners, at least) "With Teeth" album. Not a bad album, but coming nearly six years after the commercially under performing and hard to digest double disc "The Fragile" many were hoping for something with a bit more imagination and bite. "Year Zero," for loyal and casual fans alike, delivers that bite.

TojesDolan
04-10-2007, 01:30 PM
EDIT: nvm they were all found

bolded the errors tbqh

I read the rest bt didn't find, maybe I need to read deeper.

Commas/periods go before the last quotation mark. Things like "Year Zero", would become "Year Zero,"

false, they come after if they don't form part of the sentence.

=o

And John, I like to italicize latin locutions but that's just me

Wish
04-10-2007, 02:00 PM
Oh, okay. My mistake.

TojesDolan
04-10-2007, 02:07 PM
no problem =)

Iluvatar
04-10-2007, 02:26 PM
Why did you make a new thread for this instead of bumping the Writers Block?

JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 03:18 PM
i don't know :(

TojesDolan
04-10-2007, 04:41 PM
Anal retentive people don't look at old threads tbqh

Iluvatar
04-10-2007, 06:30 PM
Oh I'm just wondering. I really wished that thread had endd up ever working correctly :(.

JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 07:44 PM
i think it did ok and still does when its up and running. but the return of the community thread and olympus especially may have stolen some of its thunder.

Liberi Fatali
04-10-2007, 07:52 PM
It is hard to believe that Trent Reznor has been doing this nearly 20 years. Between NIN's first full length release in 1989, Pretty Hate Machine, numerous albums of odds and ends, live performances, and the explosion of the now classic The Downward Spiral LP, Reznor has dazzled us with his musical brilliance, annoyed us with his angst, surprised us with his humanity, and shocked us with his dark vision. Some would say he disappointed with the lean and somewhat uninspired (to the ears of some listeners at least) With Teeth album. Not a bad effort, but coming nearly six years after the commercially under performing and hard to digest double disc The Fragile, many were hoping for something with a bit more imagination and bite. Year Zero, for loyal and casual fans alike delivers that bite.I altered it more than you would like, but I think your version is a bit awkward in parts.

JohnXDoe
04-10-2007, 07:54 PM
oic what you did there. subtle yet effective. ima using it :)

plus i think i am moving from using my usual quotation marks to using italics for album titles, song titles, etc....just looks tidier.

Liberi Fatali
04-10-2007, 08:01 PM
Yeah, I think italics give the review more flow due to less clutter. And bolding just looks silly. At least that is what I think the common belief is.

Liberi Fatali
04-10-2007, 11:48 PM
In fact to even mention this is a concept album and according to Reznor the first half of a larger whole is besides the point, as most fans and listeners will hardly care or notice.
This sentence in the conclusion confuses the heck out of me.

JohnXDoe
04-11-2007, 12:00 AM
This sentence in the conclusion confuses the heck out of me.
i was trying to convey the fact that the album stands on its own even if you don't "get" or care about the concept. i suppose i could have just said that, though.

i now regret a little not putting a small paragraph in about the concept, perhaps quote some lyrics, and lend some credit to it as to why this album is so tight. obviously Trent was following a strict vision and it helped him realize a very well fleshed out album. but more reviews are coming and i'm sure they will touch on it.

tbh i didn't know this was a "concept" album when i started the review and only found out it was 2/3's in. i figured leave well enough alone since as i've said before i think the album stands well on its own.