Scapegoat!

[Blaze_Vamp]

I worked really hard on this song, I made seven copies before I got what I liked. So I hope you like it. Also comments of constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated.

Tick tock
tick tock
quarter to three
it's time for me.......
to prove my worth.

To be a vagabond forevermore
I'm just going to leave, walk out that door.
I was the bull and you were the matador,
but I just settled the score.

Everyone wants me to take the hit.
So I throw my life into the pit.
Nothing to do now, just sit and wait,
dangling on the line, now I'm the bait.

Unknown to those around me and you,
doesn't matter what I do.
But just for that I try harder.
No one notices me, no one cares to bother.

Never fret, it's time to win.
Cast out those I called my kin.
Destroy this feeling like it's tin.
Grow the fur as I shed my skin.
It's time to gain my post,
from those I hate the most.

War may be my only salvation,
blinded by all except this temptation.
To defeat a beast, I must become a beast.
Just to save myself, need I say the least.

So I'll have to let you go
and just so you know.
The memories that you cultivated,
have now all turned to hatred,
so heed these words that I've stated.

To be a vagabond forevermore
I'm just going to leave, walk out that door.
I was the bull and you were the matador
but I just settled the score.
but I just settled the score.
but I just settled the score.
but I just settled the score.

[Seeders]

you need to rewrite it some more. the rhyming makes it unreadable for me. i seriously cant figure out what this song is about, but i am stoned so it could be that.

hmm..ill cut out the parts i dont like.

Tick tock
tick tock
quarter to three
it's time for me.......
to prove my worth.

To be a vagabond forevermore
I'm just going to leave, walk out that door.
I was the bull and you were the matador
but I just settled the score.


dangling on the line, now I'm the bait.

Unknown to those around me and you,
doesn't matter what I do.
But just for that I try harder.
No one notices me, no one cares to bother.

Never fret, it's time to win.
Cast out those I called my kin.
Grow the fur as I shed my skin.
It's time to gain my post,

War may be my only salvation,
blinded by all except this .
To defeat a beast, I must become a beast.
Just to save myself,

So I'll have to let you go
and just so you know.
The memories that you cultivated,

To be a vagabond forevermore
I'm just going to leave, walk out that door.
I was the bull and you were the matador
but I just settled the score.
but I just settled the score.
but I just settled the score.
but I just settled the score.

[Surf]

I could barely read this. The rhyming is just nasty. There's no need to rhyme any lines, yet alone four in a row. I'm no going to bother critting anything else becuase the rhymes were just too big of a problem to get past.