Dear Mr. President

[Seeders]

All they lyrics are sang during playing the E for 3 counts, then G is played for one count between lines.

E - - - E - - - E - - - G - - -
______________________

(played real slow)
Laying on the sidewalk
Thinking how I'm cold as hell
Concrete used to be fun
Now its the enemy

(accelerate into bridge)
(bridge)
cant dance in the rain
since I lost my way
theres cash to be made
dont dance in the rain

(explode into chorus)
Tonight its - storming
Nothings - warm but
I've got - coins for
The liquor - store and
All these - forties mean
All bad - mornings but
its so - boring oh
boring - boring YA!

(slow it down again)
Wish I could buy an island
I wish I could buy a pen
I'd write the President
Why dont you take my head?

(accelerate into bridge)
dont dance in the rain
dont dance in the rain
dont dance in the rain
money to be made

(explode into chorus)
Tonight its storm - ing
Nothing is warm - but
I've got coins - for
The liquor store - and
All these forties - mean
All bad mornings - but
its so boring - oh
boring boring - YA!

(jam fest)

[wammy_bar]

i like the 2 lines before the last one, and i also liked how u made the lines all cut up in the 2nd stanza, i always suck at figuring out what people mean in poetry, so i can't give thoughts on that, but it was good. also i find it funny that the president prolly couldn't decypher this either haha.

[trippedhimself]

It's alright. Nothing strikingly original. But good. I lieked the last verse a lot. I guess it was just a bit... boring.

"Oh I wish I could buy a pen
I would write to the president"

good line.^^
it was alrihgt. keep writing.

[Seeders]

i like the 2 lines before the last one, and i also liked how u made the lines all cut up in the 2nd stanza, i always suck at figuring out what people mean in poetry, so i can't give thoughts on that, but it was good. also i find it funny that the president prolly couldn't decypher this either haha.

I wasn't trying to "mean" anything with this song. When I write I like to paint a picture. Apparently I'm not doing a good job of that. This poem is supposed to be about a bum and many of the lines are thoughts in his head. I tried to make him seem a little unstable.

[punknmetal4lyf]

I understood the picture quite well. You are pretty damn good at painting pictures. Also I notice a trend with your work. You always seem to have a cut up choppy stanza that more than vaguely resembles curt cobain's writing style. Any chance you are trying to imitate?

Anyway, keep up the good work as I am quite stunned at your songwriting abilities.

[Seeders]

I understood the picture quite well. You are pretty damn good at painting pictures. Also I notice a trend with your work. You always seem to have a cut up choppy stanza that more than vaguely resembles curt cobain's writing style. Any chance you are trying to imitate?

Anyway, keep up the good work as I am quite stunned at your songwriting abilities.

Not at all trying to imitate him, though I do love his work and am influenced by him. He was very interested in bodily functions, especially the grotesque. He also loved to have contradictions or things that didn't quite make sense like: We could plant a house, we could build a tree, I dont even care, we could have all three.

I just try to think of a character or situation which has perked my interest in one way or another, and try to paint it with words.

[Seeders]

Updated now that its put to an actual song.