I've Got A Rap For You

[DeadReligion]

I'll probably be killed for writing this. Or, excuse me, I'll have a cap popped in my ***...biatch.

I’ve Got A Rap For You

So you know how ya niggas feel cold?
You know they suffer?
And yet you’re bouncing in your limo hummer,
Talkin’ about bling bling and killing.

Shove that bling right up your ***.
It was found by slaves,
Black slaves to the white diamond trade.

Acting like you’re a symbol
Of your race and how they’ll prosper
Well, “fiddy,” if you are,
Than the Blacks are pretty ****ed.

Acting like you’re the man,
Because you spit words about “hunnies”
And poppin’ some caps. **** you, violence isn’t cool.

[Minus The Flair]

DR, just wondering, are you actually black? Out of curiosity. Funny last sentence line by the way.

[Eliminator]

do you ever get tired of writing the same ****

[Surf]

Sorry to say man, but this doesn't work. You treat the genre like a joke and it shows; the lyrics just seem like a poor parody.

Just seems like a poor version of something by Nas or A Tribe Called Quest. Sucka Nigga by Tribe is basically this, but better.

It doesn't seem like you take the genre seriously, and it shows. If you really want to write rap lyrics, then expose yourself to more of it. Give it some credit for a start. I prefer most hip hop lyrics to rock lyrics anyway.

[DeadReligion]

do you ever get tired of writing the same ****
^ Dumber than a doornail. You ever get tired of being an a$$hole, Eliminadouche?

No, I'm white. Also, this wasn't meant to be a rap. It was just meant to make fun of rap. Yeah, not my best work. Also, I do poetry not lyrics.

[DeadReligion]

What the hell is racist about anti-violence? Dumbass. Maybe you should try...y'know, reading something before making an assumption like that.

[Seeders]

ya it doesn't really work. you come off sounding like a douchebag, and if I were "fiddy" and I heard that I probably wouldn't even bother responding. Not that 50cent writes many good raps himself. The problem is how obvious you are. You're trying to sound like you're just talking naturally, but the lines are very unnatural and therefore it sounds like you're trying too hard. When Eminem raps he is able to sound like he is talking like he always does, yet everything flows. You're missing the flow.