Nyc

[Aryl7]

NYC
lust-filled neon lights
hollow out the dimly lit alley
drifters trickle in and out,
a corridor full of people
living on their knees

the plasma bulbs
stir the mire,
spitting out a whore
"I'm just a sex junkie
lookin for a dealer baby"
and it's the most
victorious, euphoric
noise you've ever heard
that she could say so much
in so few words

[ImusInTheMorning]

NYC
lust-filled neon lights
hollow out the dimly lit alley
drifters trickle in and out,
a corridor full of people
living on their knees
Fantastic beginning. "lust-filled" and "drifters trickle".. both great word choice. same with a corridor full and living on their knees. awesome beginning.

the plasma bulbs
stir the mire,
spitting out a whore
"I'm just a sex junkie
lookin for a dealer baby"
and it's the most
victorious, euphoric
noise you've ever heard
that she could say so much
in so few wordsplasma bulbs trail back to the neon lights in the first stanza, awesome job. i like how it went from the depraved rants of a hooker back again to beautiful writing (victorious, euphoric). last 3 lines are excellent.

dunno what else to say, beautiful piece of writing. short but sweet... awesome to say the least. i liked it a lot.

8/10

[RNR]

The bitch in me wants you to replace lust-filled with lusty.

[Aryl7]

anybody else?

[DeadReligion]

I like this. I did something similar, because I love NYC, seeing as I was born there. Mine was an acrostic, though. I think Lust-filled sounds better than lusty.