Repetition of the Verse of Fear

[MissiDominici]

It was calm like a dark cloudy day
And it seemed like everything was fine
Then my animals started to run
And the thunder came crashing down

Please
Don't exploit my fears
Please
Don't repeat your verse
Please
I'd rather keep my sanity
Please
I'm not very well

Interrogation of impossible questions
Denial of no reply
This is not the way it should be
This is not the way it will be

I will settle this quarrel
I hope to stay with my love
If I do, I'll be grateful
If not, I won't let history **** me

[hope lost]

The first Stanza bears no relation to it's successors and the content of the following stanzas is weak, cliched and unimaginative.

Go here:

http://www.sputnikmusic.com/forums/showthread.php?t=459065

[TojesDolan]

OK cliches:
I'd rather keep my sanity
I hope to stay with my love

And a couple more but Firefox fagged up a bit. :/

Otherwise, don't swear if you don't know how to do it. Don't do it in such a stale context, try more stuff like the first stanza, simple in sections but complicated and pretty much well sustained in others.

[FA]

hopefully i'll get this tomorrow, it's late and I need sleep.