rate my tunes please

[PyroPhreak]

critics are welcome :)
just don't say "that's good"
because "that's annoying"
something to help me improve is what im looking for :)

http://putstuff.putfile.com/5163/6482254
http://putstuff.putfile.com/20621/7339344

[evaworcim]

first song: starts out nice, but keeps doing the same thing for a while with only slight variations, takes a while to get into it although the last half or so of the song was pretty cool, I must say though, your drum samples are awful, you may want to change those , that snare (or retarded hi-hat, I'm not sure) was painful. your lead was better, although not the bass, that one was kind of annoying, the lead however was not what I usually go for, but nice all the same. maybe work on your structure a bit more, as far as I could tell this was only one main theme, with a few slight variations, it just doesn't feel like a complete song, more of a sketch of a song with only one main part written, and re-written several different ways, if you know what i mean.

second song: This one is a step up from the first song, although your drum samples are once again bad, and I really hate the guitar, and I'm assuming your using fruity loops, the slayer plug in is awful so plz never use it) their are occasions when it'll sound ok, but never for a distorted guitar, there is more of a structure to this one, although only slightly, there is two different parts which i noticed, and I didn't mention this on the first song, but it applies to it as well, some of your note choices aren't very ear friendly, they seem out of place at times, and bother me. The second songs ending is very nice as well actually, only the lead with the delay on it, isn't very good, and the delay sucks.

THIS IS A POORLY STRUCTURED CRITIQUE, and is poorly written, look at my atrocious grammar, and spelling error,

CONCLUSION, you have some skillz, but at the moment, your stuff could use a lot of work, keep practicing, read up on production techniques and shi, a lot of that stuff comes in handy, just google searching will provide you plenty of helpful stuff, and also maybe learn something about songwriting, i'm sure there's lots of stuff on the internet for that i'm sure aswell, if not I know there's a few good books out there, it'll probably teach you to add more structure to your songs, and end up with a much nicer song.

overall i'd give it like 4/10 and the second song probably a 5/10.

adios

PS This is my first shitty critique thing so it porbably sucks but w/e

[PyroPhreak]

thx for your opinion
i hadn't read this before i made another song, so here it is
http://putstuff.putfile.com/21757/4065811
yeah, ill look into song structure. i've been told that i'm weak there by others 2
im just starting, so that may explain my lack of ability, but yeah, im trying
:chug: cheers

[evaworcim]

this next one is pretty awesome, it made me feel like dancing atm ^_^ the same other stuff applies, but i liked your leads and stuff much better in this one, even if you did use the slayer plug in, this one sounds cool, and the drums where much nicer and faster paced on this one, and I didn't hate the samples much, the only part i disagreed with was around the 1:45 mark, where you had one riff, and you just played the other one over top of it, it didn't go too well imo, but overall it's a good song, and an improvement over the previous two. 7/10

perklaps?

[Angelicrock]

I didnt like it. It was boring and had no climax just a steady state of mediocre.

[Druumer89]

eh, it was mediocre...ive heard better, but your on the right track