Zjanarhi
11-10-2006, 01:27 PM
A song I wrote a while back. Feel free to crit, and I might crit you on yours.
"Canker Sore”
Enamored, I beg of you,
From a sight 2,000 miles away,
Reminiscing pixilated memories.
Covet the ones who show me the machine’s gaze
That saw you smile from a whisper’s distance.
(I regret I never took the chance)
You’re a scar on my palette.
If only I could stop tonguing you,
Maybe you’d go away.
But it hurts to stop,
And I know not to persist.
You still exist, thus I’m still half.
I was intact, ‘til you salted these wounds.
Forced to take the pain, in a dishonest laugh.
I wish I could teach you everything,
Minus the risk of losing you forever.
As the sickness waned, you grew on my lips.
In time you will vanish, like everything has from me.
You’re a blemish on my palette.
If only I could stop tonguing you,
Maybe you’d heal.
But it hurts to smile.
This won’t last forever.
Untreated, you’ll poison me,
Like every victim you’ve possessed.
Like a broken dog, I stay and wait.
Under your remote eyes, you have me oppressed.
You don’t realize, but you’re in control.
Take me for what I’m worth,
Even if I’m nil to you
You’re a scratch on my palette.
If only I could stop tonguing you,
Maybe you’d be cured.
But I still love you,
Even if you don’t care.
There it is.
"Canker Sore”
Enamored, I beg of you,
From a sight 2,000 miles away,
Reminiscing pixilated memories.
Covet the ones who show me the machine’s gaze
That saw you smile from a whisper’s distance.
(I regret I never took the chance)
You’re a scar on my palette.
If only I could stop tonguing you,
Maybe you’d go away.
But it hurts to stop,
And I know not to persist.
You still exist, thus I’m still half.
I was intact, ‘til you salted these wounds.
Forced to take the pain, in a dishonest laugh.
I wish I could teach you everything,
Minus the risk of losing you forever.
As the sickness waned, you grew on my lips.
In time you will vanish, like everything has from me.
You’re a blemish on my palette.
If only I could stop tonguing you,
Maybe you’d heal.
But it hurts to smile.
This won’t last forever.
Untreated, you’ll poison me,
Like every victim you’ve possessed.
Like a broken dog, I stay and wait.
Under your remote eyes, you have me oppressed.
You don’t realize, but you’re in control.
Take me for what I’m worth,
Even if I’m nil to you
You’re a scratch on my palette.
If only I could stop tonguing you,
Maybe you’d be cured.
But I still love you,
Even if you don’t care.
There it is.