crude vapid bohemian poettry itt

[(*The Noonward Race*)]

Crumble crunching misc noise flowers random as splashes with drop drips
match can chafe itself toward flowering as lightbulb flashes
simple nimble noises not like roar
dull brown grey ever-swirling roar unlistenable we can hear it
dull dull dull
cars sweat into the night


making a box. this box is kind of made. making, making, making a box.
brown wet cardboard, the box the box the box.
this box sucks.

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burberry warm juice sloshy wiggling winter water
weird stanzas stanza'd awwwww.

when i go to a movie i sit
i watch i hear fidget a bit
hello says the screen
pictures oh so keen

careening whipping wheels wear down the ground
oh wheee. we are chasing a ****ing criminal whoo.

stipple stapple

staple.

i am unable to

get through.

to you.

[silicon71]

I love it

[(*The Noonward Race*)]

sup 2 mins later
i went to a really deep intense movie and i came back in this weird reflective state and everything seemed so signifigant to me and scary i didnt know how to express it so i decided to open notepad

[MWGRSN]

It almost reminds me of a psychodellic Dr. Seuss poem. I really like it!

[(*The Noonward Race*)]

Thank you!

I feel that I am going to try and write a poetry piece that's supposed to be read in 5/4 for fun one of these days.

[MWGRSN]

Thank you!

I feel that I am going to try and write a poetry piece that's supposed to be read in 5/4 for fun one of these days.

5/4? That would be impressive. But it would be much more impressive if it was done in 15/16. If someone could write poetry that well, I'm pretty sure they'd be the only rich poet. At all. LOL

[TojesDolan]

OK I don't expect much from you, so that's good.

Crumble crunching misc noise flowers random as splashes with drop drips
match can chafe itself toward flowering as lightbulb flashes
simple nimble noises not like roar
dull brown grey ever-swirling roar unlistenable we can hear it
dull dull dull
cars sweat into the night

don't use contractions. "miscelaneous", for instance. The images are pretty vivid, but as usual I can't catch the vibe. Argh.


making a box. this box is kind of made. making, making, making a box.
brown wet cardboard, the box the box the box.
this box sucks.

Nice.

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Rain, I suppose?

burberry warm juice sloshy wiggling winter water
weird stanzas stanza'd awwwww.


Again...

when i go to a movie i sit
i watch i hear fidget a bit
hello says the screen
pictures oh so keen


I'm not very keen of rhyming, but this one works particularly well.

careening whipping wheels wear down the ground
oh wheee. we are chasing a ****ing criminal whoo.

stipple stapple

staple.

i am unable to

get through.

to you.

At least you could swear properly. As usual. I can't get through what you say. It seems to me as random images... about... I don't know. It seems like love material in the end, somewhat a confused young lad in the beginning, a car crash, or an acid trip, or an accident. I don't know.

:confused:

[Surf]

Poetry isn't written in time signatures. The closest you can get is metered poetry. Just a little something I thought you might like to know.

[TojesDolan]

It could be a polymetric song.

And the funny thing is Jordan is banned lol.

[Surf]

Musical structure has no real bearing on poetic form. You could write in the style of a time signature, e.g. five syllables in a four line verse, but it wouldn't be in 5/4, just an imitation.

[(*The Noonward Race*)]

Musical structure has no real bearing on poetic form. You could write in the style of a time signature, e.g. five syllables in a four line verse, but it wouldn't be in 5/4, just an imitation.
supposed to be read in 5/4
yeah.


Okay Tojes,
Crumble crunching misc noise flowers random as splashes with drop dripsokay this means crumble crunching sounds, (misc sounds/noise) flowers (verb) randomly
as
splashes with drop drips (it rains)

so:
im describing the small sounds that seem profound to me because of the wierd mood i was in that made depressed/nervy and it seems insignifigant but thats the irony because it is very significant to me at that time.

making a box. this box is kind of made. making, making, making a box.
brown wet cardboard, the box the box the box.
this box sucks.i think this is my fight back at the depression-ish state and its deosnt seem to be cheering me up. i am insignificant.

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tip tip tip tip tipawkward rhythmn. surprising.
burberry warm juice sloshy wiggling winter water
weird stanzas stanza'd awwwww.an kind of turnaround, almost happy. uses onamotapoeaiea at the end and alliteration
to a movie i sit
i watch i hear fidget a bit
hello says the screen
pictures oh so keennow here is what happened to me

its very sarcastic poetry

its supposed to show that i think its absurd that i wouldnt write a surprising "weird" poem like this
careening whipping wheels wear down the ground
oh wheee. we are chasing a ****ing criminal whoo.

stipple stapple

staple.

i am unable to

get through.

to you.describing the movie and then frustration that the mood i was in was so hard to express.



don't use contractions. "miscelaneous", for instance. The images are pretty vivid, but as usual I can't catch the vibe. Argh.well i write with my own logic that i cant expect anyone to really understand but their aesthetic sensual presentation is pretty interesting itself so i want to see if people catch on to any of it

[Surf]

supposed to be read in 5/4

Regardless, music =/= poetry. Words have no (or were not given) note values. There is no inherent basis or reason for them to be placed within the confines of musical notation. Placing poetry into a musical format is akin to measuring temperature in dollars; it has no meaning because the each is not related to the other.

Anyway, this is a bit of a futile arguement and its just derailing the thread.

Its very good in its own way, its like not much I've ever read before and the explanation helps alot.

[TojesDolan]

Woah you're the sh¡t young man.

I love you Jordan.