Sin

[Minos]

Just a beginning...yet again, but I'd like some thoughts before I set out further:

Sin
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I went for a walk
in the summer heat
There I saw a woman
sitting on her knees
Naked in the snow
she was toying with the cold
Seemingly so lonely
with nobody to hold

Her lips were turning blue
the tears that she had cried
Folded with low pressure
and slowly crystallized
It was then I saw the blood
I don't know how I missed
It had turned into icicles
and dangled from her wrists
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The flow is exaggerated on purpose...I can hear it in my head, though that doesn't really help you guys :(

[slack]

I went for a walk
in the summer heat
There I saw a woman
sitting on her knees
Naked in the snowHow can this be

[Minos]

How can this be

I saw this post last night, and decided against flaming you. I woke up this morning and thought, "Hey, maybe I should explain the concept I am using as a foundation for the work." But you know what? F*** that.

I didn't ask you to question the theoretical probablity of what I wrote. If I decide it's the middle of August and there is snow on the ground, then you better start shoveling the driveway. If I decide there's a turtle flying through the air with a 2x4 in his mouth and dandelions floating out of his ***, you better take cover. It is the writer that creates the image for the reader, not vice versa.

Now, I stated that it wasn't finished, and I will overlook your comment because of this. Essentially, the concept behind the writing is that sin is guised as innocence. That is all I will say on that, because I just really don't think I should have to break apart my work just so you understand that it doesn't have to fit within the realm of possibility.