Oblique
09-17-2006, 02:26 AM
the chorus and bridge are really weak i know and i look to totally rewrite them, any suggestions would be appreciated as well as critisism...
The flame is getting colder
Its going out, It’s lost the fight
This can't get much older
We’ve been lost in the hindsight
Of all of our selfish rejections
From all of our conceited delight
And we’ll be the ones to take the injection
We’ll be the ones who ruin our own lives
We’re losing the fight
The fight for our own lives
We’re losing our sight
The sight to survive
When will we ever learn
We are corrupting ourselves
Being what we have become
Is putting us back on shelves
Take a look at that picture
It’s been broken, Lost inside
All along you’ve been sure
That we’d never be outside
Of all of our perfect reflections
From all of our thinning facades
And you’ll be the one to have the infection
We’ll be the ones that end up failing twice
Struggle for your life (You must)
Struggle for your life (Or lose)
We need to, Believe you
When you say that you will shed
You have to, Really do
All those things that you have said
The flame is getting colder
Its going out, It’s lost the fight
This can't get much older
We’ve been lost in the hindsight
Of all of our selfish rejections
From all of our conceited delight
And we’ll be the ones to take the injection
We’ll be the ones who ruin our own lives
We’re losing the fight
The fight for our own lives
We’re losing our sight
The sight to survive
When will we ever learn
We are corrupting ourselves
Being what we have become
Is putting us back on shelves
Take a look at that picture
It’s been broken, Lost inside
All along you’ve been sure
That we’d never be outside
Of all of our perfect reflections
From all of our thinning facades
And you’ll be the one to have the infection
We’ll be the ones that end up failing twice
Struggle for your life (You must)
Struggle for your life (Or lose)
We need to, Believe you
When you say that you will shed
You have to, Really do
All those things that you have said