Fade

[Aus_rock_god]

Before anyone reads this, I'm not emo fu*kya!.

This is one of my deeper songs. I'm particularly proud of the chorus.

It's about how I feel about losing the ones close to me. Recently, I had a major major fallout with my entire family. I no longer talk to them. The only family I have is my 4 month old son, who I get to see once a fortnight. I blame the majority of this on how I cut myself off emotionally from everyone but my ex-girlfriend. My parents got sick of me not talking to them, my ex got sick of hearing about my past.

The music this was written with is Metal with a hint of Grunge.

Enjoy


Fade

Music by Marshall Woolfrey
Lyrics by Jason M-G

Performed by Make Shift Manner

Looking back at the way I was before
I can see the past
See the source of all this pain

Looking over at the ones that I adore
Across a rolling ocean
That's driving me insane

If you sit and read the writings on the wall
You'll see that I will fade
When I'm stripped and torn away
From the ones that I adore
I'll fade away
Though it's hard to see the signs on my face
I want release from pain
See the markings on my arms
See the scars across my back
I wish they would fade

Putting words to my story is like
Ripping back my fingernails
Until you draw my blood

I try to cope, try to move on and survive
But how can my future be bright
When my past is black?

If you sit and read the writings on the wall
You'll see that I will fade
When I'm stripped and torn away
From the ones that I adore
I'll fade away
Though it's hard to see the signs on my face
I want release from pain
See the markings on my arms
See the scars across my back
I wish they would fade

I'll fade away, I'll fade away, I'll fade away, I'll fade x6

If you sit and read the writings on the wall
You'll see that I will fade
When I'm stripped and torn away
From the ones that I adore
I'll fade away
Though it's hard to see the signs on my face
I want release from pain
See the markings on my arms
See the scars across my back
I wish they would fade
Away


Copyright, Make Shift Manner, 2006. Anyone who rips our work off is henceforth a jerk and will be treated as such.

[Aus_rock_god]

I'm just going to bump this in an attempt to get somone to poke holes in my lyrics.

[Surf]

Emo

i kid i kid.

but obvious joking aside, the problem i had with this piece was that it felt very melodramatic. you say this is one of your 'deeper' songs, but it seems to have gone over the top slightly. when you get writing, some of its quite decent, but, and this is especially true of the chorus, you seem to take it to far and get a bit ott. it ends up seeming like a power ballad, all slow intros, big drum fills and making clutching motions with your hands. i'd combat this by adding something in around the chorus. your obviously very proud of it, but between (i.e. in the verses) you need something more, something to engage the listener. try metaphor imagery etcetc. to look further into this, try the better writer guide at the top of s&l.

overall, not bad, but too melodramatic in terms of theme and skimpy on the subject matter.

[Aus_rock_god]

THANK YOU!!!!

Cheers mate. It is a bit melodramitic, but that is sincrely how I feel about the whole damn situation, but I think I'll add a pre-chorus in that brings the subject matter home, with some nice imagry and metophors now that you said that.

You're right about the power ballard though. This thing only has an 8 bar intro though, but it does have a massive guitar solo though.

I also think the bridge in the middle (I'll fade away, I'll fade away, I'll fade away, I'll fade) needs changing.