Song I wrote

[Riding The Short Bus]

And what if I said right now
that I can't live without you
and what would you do this moment
if I told you how I felt about you
The way I feel when you're with me
The way I think about you constantly
and what if I told you how I felt about you


I won't
ever feel this way again
I opened up and to you and showed you all of me
and I want you to know
that I have never loved someone as much as I love you

I don't
know what i'd do if you weren't there
you are the one that makes me want to be
and I want you to know
that I will never love someone as much as I love you


And what if I said right now
that I can't live without you
and what would you do this moment
if I told you how I felt about you
The way I feel when you are with me
The way I think about you constantly
and what if I told you how I felt about you

I can't forget this
I can't pretend that I'm all right
I'll never look at you same
It hurts to hear your voice
It hurts to see your face
It hurts to be around you
But I'd never let a moment slip away

you're beautiful
perfect smile
your embrace
will blow the storms away

and what would you do this moment
if I said that I love you




This was spur of the moment. Tell me what think, good or bad. Also I don't know how anyone else would sing this but it sings and flows decently well the way I do.

[Volume8]

Well its a good enough song, The subjects obviously been done a thousand times before, and there doesn't seem to be any real original charectorists that leap off the page at you, I think id rather hear it sang with musical backing before i made a decision on this one.

Good luck with this one, i hope it all turns out decently well

[Riding The Short Bus]

I do agree it has been written about a thousand times before. This was actually the first time in my life I have ever experienced any of that to write about it.

I myself am a drummer and can't sing very well so it would sound like crap, but I have the general tune worked out.

[Volume8]

Well thats fair enough,

I mean for some reason unlike all the other similar posts on this site you got a feeling of genuine emotion, However, to those of us that have already felt that, its old news. It is written decently well but for some reason its hard to really relate to possibly because there isn't enough descriptive language to explain the circumstanes, Its all well and good to say what your feelings are, but you have to explain them to get the full effect.

Haha p.s. please change this sentence
but it sings and flows decently well the way I do.
but when sang it still flows quite/pretty/fairly well