Innerdream demo - Stranger in Exile

[innerdream]

Hello everyone

Hope you are all well

I have recorded a demo of a new song – Stranger in Exile – it’s more of a melodic / ambient track than I have written before – as always, your feedback on the song all areas (guitars, drums, vocals, lyrics, melody / harmonies, dynamics etc) is most welcome

The link is below

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=252119

Lyrics

How could this be? I didn’t want you to know
I’m living my life so free but I didn’t want to be
I’m all alone
I’m all alone

Like a stranger in exile
Like a stranger in exile

Time after time I feel like I’m all alone
Inside my dream I sleep but I didn’t want to be
I’m all alone
I’m all alone

Like a stranger in exile
Like a stranger in exile

How could this be? I didn’t want you to know
I’m living my life so free but I didn’t want to be
I’m all alone
I’m all alone

Like a stranger in exile
Like a stranger in exile


(c) PFM 07/09/2006

[Ripping Hammer]

At first I was put of by the (admittedly) kind of gay drum machine, but as the soundscape you've created unfolds, it seems that any more percussion would be distracting and superfluous. Its clear, to me at least, that the focal point of this song is the cascading guitar lines, thoughtfully composed and tastefully performed. Particularly impressive are the duel guitar solo lines. Not showy, but tasteful and melodic, with great tone. With better production this could be quite an aural treat.

Your vocals aren't great for the song, however, this type of song demands a ****ing serious crooner. Overall, very interesting and unique, you seem to be doing your own thing with willful disregard for influences or trends, which is bold and commands my respect.

[innerdream]

At first I was put of by the (admittedly) kind of gay drum machine, but as the soundscape you've created unfolds, it seems that any more percussion would be distracting and superfluous. Its clear, to me at least, that the focal point of this song is the cascading guitar lines, thoughtfully composed and tastefully performed. Particularly impressive are the duel guitar solo lines. Not showy, but tasteful and melodic, with great tone. With better production this could be quite an aural treat.

Your vocals aren't great for the song, however, this type of song demands a ****ing serious crooner. Overall, very interesting and unique, you seem to be doing your own thing with willful disregard for influences or trends, which is bold and commands my respect.

Many thanks for the response and taking a listen - you've made some great points :chug:

I agree that the sparseness of the song brings out the dynamics of the guitar melody - I also agree that song needs a stronger vocal

[PECOAE]

It sounds so Cure-ish I don't think you should be calling it alternative metal.

Get a british guy to sing the vocals.

I could do them even, but not whoever you got please thank you.

It sounds good though.

[innerdream]

It sounds so Cure-ish I don't think you should be calling it alternative metal.

Get a british guy to sing the vocals.

I could do them even, but not whoever you got please thank you.

It sounds good though.

cheers for your comments :chug: