Ruin By Selling Out

[kurtnovogrohl]

all the way for i dare not buy it
what am i supposed to do without you?....
life will never be the same when i picked up the pieces

rock 'n' roll legacy
rock 'n' roll lies!....

don't you ruin my holiday when i wanna holiday..
holiday is where my life is changing color
ooh oligopoly
don't you ruin my holiday when i wanna holiday
holiday is where i fell a whole lot better
hope it's not too late

so what you gonna..what you gonna do!!...

truth is said and i dare not buy it
what am i supposed to do without you?
life is never easy when i picked up the pieces

[Ethan.]

I don't really understand it.

[Mitch2oo6]

Seventies pop-rock is how it read to me. Overuse of 'holiday' in stanza three, kind of chokes the flow, makes the verse repetitive. On that note, it's also too long, and you just repeat your self over and over. Going backwards to the couplet...Well it's not one of the better ones. Not needed really. Going back again, line two on stanza one = cliche. Cut. Or change so it's not cliche.
I didnt dig the last stanza either. Boring, all been done before.

In short, the piece has been done a billion times before. Get more original, listen to more music, watch the news for inspiration, read newspapers, anything. Dont stop trying though.

[Dugan]

Build on it, and it could become alot better. Seek to be original with it.