Faceless

[Comfortably_Numb]

Words catch fire
and flame with a fury
that only we will ever know
Many years pass
as I discover the grass
which spreads the searing glow
Too scolded to see
what I have come to love
and all that is serene
You took the free ride
while I walked my own path
two different shades of green

The war cries aren’t heard
and no lives are lost
but there is pain just the same
You were taught to speak words
not to think obscure
and live without questioning the reign
The swirling rain droplets
drip down my face
joining the tears that stream
You are lost
and without a face
afriad of all that is obscene
You believe I acted in disrespect
and hid under the covers
our blood may be thick
so I choose to dilute my own
in with all the others

I'm planning to change the title, I just didn't know what else to put. Any crits will be appreciated and returned.

[JasonP]

I kinda like it,
don't know what else to say at the moment:p
I'll try and think of a better comment
But for now, I just like it:)

[Comfortably_Numb]

I kinda like it,
don't know what else to say at the moment:p
I'll try and think of a better comment
But for now, I just like it:)

Haha well that is better than nothing. Thank you kindly.

[sjada]

Is unobscure a real word? It might be, I'm just not sure. Pretty cool though.

[Comfortably_Numb]

Is unobscure a real word? It might be, I'm just not sure. Pretty cool though.
Well apparently it isn't, so I'm going to have to rearrange that line.

[Comfortably_Numb]

Changed...

You were taught to say words
and think of the unobscure
not to use your brain

...to...

You were taught to speak words
not to think obscure
and live without questioning the reign

[sportsfan4427]

this is really good

last thing i'll read before i go to bed tonight so thank you

[Comfortably_Numb]

this is really good

last thing i'll read before i go to bed tonight so thank you

No problem. Thank you for replying.

[Comfortably_Numb]

bump

[slowgunner]

This is great writting. The images that it invokes are very real!