Mermaids (fair God and stone-faces)

[kurtnovogrohl]

happiness leaves awaking loneliness
and beside you now
lies a difference you know
how can it be and still i can't believe

and i feel denied

Unfair excuse
and all i ask another day
if i could leave this pain i owe home

never mistaking we can't change a thing
surprised as I was to never need more time
on the outside tide
does it whisper at all?
and maybe it'll be forever till whenever now

cause i feel denied

someone you knew
silence that make the change in you
and I would light the light bone fuse

it's hard to shake off these daily sad-to-sees
i'd rather search the stones undo
don't wanna face what i have to
if come a stranger be so true
you sting like an angel

[usuck]

QUOTE=kurtnovogrohl]happiness leaves awaking loneliness
and beside you now
lies a difference you know
how can it be and still i can't believe
this part needs no changes

and i feel denied

Unfair excuse
and all i ask another day
if i could leave this pain i owe home
the last 2 lines are a little unclear maybe change them "and all i ask is another day" to "if I could leave this pain that I owe at home"

never mistaking we can't change a thing
surprised as I was to never need more time
on the outside tide
does it whisper at all?
and maybe it'll be forever till whenever now


cause i feel denied

someone you knew
silence that make the change in you
and I would light the light bone fuse

it's hard to shake off these daily sad-to-sees
i'd rather search the stones undo
don't wanna face what i have to
if come a stranger be so true
you sting like an angel[/QUOTE]
the rest is great, but do you mean "you sting like an angel"(this could be ironic) or "you sing like an angel"? 8/10.