Tragedy Sells

[sandsoftime]

simple i know....so give me a simple answer....tell me why i suck

Tragedy Sells

people love a hero
I’d be yours for free
all I need is love
love me love me

people love a failure
I can do that too
all I need is love
love you I love you

No more happy endings
put away the church bells
give up give out
tragedy sells tragedy sells

people love a winner
I’ll rise to the top
all I need is love
won’t stop won’t stop

people love a loser
I’ll just fall behind
all I need is love
and your time your time

No more happy endings
put away the church bells
give up give out
tragedy sells tragedy sells

people love a champion
I’ll always be there
all I need is love
tell me you care you care

people love a underdog
someone to pave the way
all I need is love
your with me everyday every day

No more happy endings
put away the church bells
give up give out
tragedy sells tragedy sells

Hmmm i'd have to say that this song is the biggest tragedy of all

[days_of_fire]

Well, the song itself isnt that bad, although I'm not much for emo. But I'll say it comes off as desperate for affection, and that you're willing to do anything for it. If that's the case, you put things in perspective. Like I said, it's not all that bad, just... desperate.

[-:Vincent:-]

people love a hero
I’d be yours for free
all I need is love
love me love me

It's an alright starting, it could be better. The first two lines are good, the second sound, I don't know, childish, maybe just cliche.

people love a failure
I can do that too
all I need is love
love you I love you

Again, first two lines are good, I like how they tie in with the beginning of the song, but the second two need work, or should just be thrown out and replaced.

No more happy endings
put away the church bells
give up give out
tragedy sells tragedy sells

First line seems a bit cliche, second and third just seem to be there. I like the fourth line though, its a good title for the song too.

people love a winner
I’ll rise to the top
all I need is love
won’t stop won’t stop

Ok, after this stanza this kind of stuff gets a bit repetitive and as always the last two lines seem out of place and uneeded. This goes for all of the following stanzas, but I wouldn't just discard it, it has some potential and i do like how you contrast "everyone loves a winer" and "everyone loves a loser" and how you can get love either way. You just need to go back through it find what you want and what you don't want then rewrite. I would reccomend adding some stuff as well to make it more interesting then the same repeating stanza's. as of now 5/10 but it has potential...good luck!:thumb:

[El_Goodo]

I like the song it seems like it would flow very nicely, I already got a melody in my head for the song. And the title is great it attracted me to click on this thread and read your song.

No more happy endings
put away the church bells
give up give out
tragedy sells tragedy sells

That's one part I don't like, it just sounds weird to me, give up and give out doesn't have the same flow as the verses.