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[slack]

eh

the car struggles to start frost on the windows still and a silence between us that i don't know how to kill the roads we take runaway from the heart it isn't long before we're just a speck in the vein of a dying countryside it always starts the same "you're so quiet" i know but it's alright 'cause i'm only dreaming of the whiteout outside the window i'm only dreaming of disappearing in a dead meadow's cold frost on my clothes cutting through 'till i'm over but hey it's alright it's alright maybe we can talk things out no? nothing needs to change say the words for me you always do i could take the wheel and kill us both and god only knows i've wanted to do something so careless and free for a long time coming where are you going you don't have a clue i loved you once i did but only when you were coming on i loved you once i did but only when you were coming on

[sexymuffin]

um...

punctuation maybe?

[slack]

punctuation is for pussies

[sjada]

This would be easier to read if you punctuated or made it into lines or something.

[-:Vincent:-]

Yeah, I would crit it, but its kind of harder when its just one huge paragraph. You don't necessarily need punctuation, but at least break it up into stanzas.

[DeadReligion]

Punctuation is good, and I just can't read this. So, until I can read it, it automatically sucks. :-P. Also, inspirational title, really, ****ing brilliant.