Audiovisual

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okay so this is my first song lyrics on this website so I hope you enjoy them. They are meant to have a Nu-Metalish feel especially like a System Of a Down feel because they're similiar to what we play...

Audiovisual ~ Radio Logic (my band)
(Verse 1)
I see you |
I hear you | X 4
I need you |
I fear you |

(Chorus)
It’s like I can’t escape
You’re an audiovisual aid
To me who needs no cure
Practice your mind rape
Sing the serenade
That my senses can no longer endure

(Verse 2)
I feel you |
I taste you | X 4
I steal you |
I waste you |

(Verse 3)
I smell you |
I chill you | X 4
I tell you |
I kill you |

(Bridge)
So much for the audiovisual aid that you’ve been giving
Not necessarily needed
So much for the audiovisual life that you’ve been living
Not necessarily pleaded

Not much but it's either a start or the whole thing. Not meant to be long. It has a meaning. It's suppose to symbolize...well you figure it out. You are the critics...

[LivingFod]

umm the verse are a little pradictabl but other than not bad for a SOAD style song.

[meizmatt]

okay so this is my first song lyrics on this website so I hope you enjoy them. They are meant to have a Nu-Metalish feel especially like a System Of a Down feel because they're similiar to what we play...

Audiovisual ~ Radio Logic (my band)
(Verse 1)
I see you |
I hear you | X 4
I need you |
I fear you |

you feel a need for the person, who you are still around or see, whom you still feel for or want but cant approach

(Chorus)
It’s like I can’t escape
You’re an audiovisual aid
To me who needs no cure
Practice your mind rape
Sing the serenade
That my senses can no longer endure

i do like the ABCABC format, i cant really find a meaning, here but i do like it

(Verse 2)
I feel you |
I taste you | X 4
I steal you |
I waste you |

(Verse 3)
I smell you |
I chill you | X 4
I tell you |
I kill you |

(Bridge)
So much for the audiovisual aid that you’ve been giving
Not necessarily needed
So much for the audiovisual life that you’ve been living
Not necessarily pleaded

Not much but it's either a start or the whole thing. Not meant to be long. It has a meaning. It's suppose to symbolize...well you figure it out. You are the critics...
im gonna take a stab and say tis about aeither a previous girlfriend/boyfriend, or about some other person who either inspired you greatly or you loved...

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your basically right on the whole theme idea. Yea I threw in the ABCABC rhyme scheme in the chorus just to mix things up. All my other chorus' from other songs are either ABAB, AABB, or no rhyme at all. Just though I'd give that a go. If it's too awkward to sing then I guess I could change it to ABABCC...or something similiar. Thanks for the input! :thumb:

[Magnus55]

Maybe I'm just from an older generation but the connotation of an "audiovisual aid", as the focus of your piece just made me think of nerds fiddling with projectors. Not sexy or romantic in the least.

[drumass04]

To be perfectly honest with you, your verses were awful. They had no substance and were incredibly boring.

Your chorus however is rather nice. As Magnus said 'audiovisual aid' is a little technogeekish, but the rest of it is great. The rhyming isn't annoying and it flows well. There are the basics of cliches in there but you just manage to escape them, skirting around the trite phrases I was expecting.

The verses, big time re-think.
The chorus, great work.

Good luck, and keep on writing!!

Timmy

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thanks for the input! I'll see what I can do to spice this one up. Sorry about audiovisual being tecknogeekish...but that has to stay.
Edit: Just a cool word and in this case it has a denotational meaning...

[drumass04]

Yeah, I like it, it just had the same effect on me as it did Magnus!

Timmy