Blow By Blow

[Specialsauce]

It took alot of courage to post this...

Notes:
*It's the lyrics to a speed-ska/skacore song that i wrote all parts to (except drums), so its meant to be sang really fast. just keep that in mind.

*This is not final, i'll take suggestions here and make it nicer later.

*I guess its meant to be kind of funny/satirical/ironic/whatever.

here goes.

Sit next to the radio
Waitin’ for a song
But they never ever play it
so it never came on

And this whole time,
I knew it all along
That they never would’ve played
that particular song
Cuz they never ever play it
so it never came on

Sat next to the phone
and waited for it to ring
but it never ever rang,
and i guess that’s just the thing
that i never really mentioned
that a couple months ago
they cut off my phone service
it really goes to show

Blow by blow, i’ll take it as it comes
Status quo, im just lower class scum

Saved up all my money
And i bleew it on roulette
But to get all that money
I hadn’t payed my debts
I never ever really thought
That this day would come
People are suing me
Everyone knows that im a chump

Blow by blow, i’ll take it as it comes
Status quo, im just lower class scum

Honestly, i think it kinda sucks, but i ask you guys's opinion anyway, because ive had people tell me it was alright.

[Jbdrummin4u]

eh.. I dont get the point of the first part, what does a radio have to do with being trash? It reminds me of a Red Hot Chili Peppers song where its a bunch of random phrases thrown together. But, if you make it kinda funky, it'd be cool. If you want meaningful lyrics, try sending a message, and sending out your emotions more clearly.

[masada]

Sit next to the radio
Waitin’ for a song
But they never ever play it
so it never came on

And this whole time,
I knew it all along
That they never would’ve played
that particular song
Cuz they never ever play it
so it never came on

You basically state the same thing about three times, and so it leaves that whole second stanza basically pointless. I think that's probably what the problem is with the song in that it seems like you're just reusing or elaborating a little bit on the same idea, and it feels redundant.