Two songs from my upcoming Demo

[Blakfeld]

Hiya

So I had a show yesterday and I realized that I really needed to get cracking on recording a demo, so I have two of the five done, and Id really love some advice from you guys if you care to give it. Its all me, and all the layering I can pull together. Ive been told Ive got a unique style, and people seem to like it, but what better place to avoid bull****ters then the internet!

http://www.myspace.com/korybrown


Theyre the only songs on there.
Thanks for any words you have to say!

[Merkaba]

Its not bad. Of course I would say work on the vocals a bit. I would say at least try to pronounce the words better. Like if you work on making sure you pronounce every syllable of the word it helps singing...ususally. I like the first minute of forgotten. I think it could be twice as good. I really like it. I would put a tad of reverb on my vocals. I don't like it where it goes to the Nirvana kinda sound around the one minute ten mark. Went out of key a few times. Wish I could play giutar well enough to record a demo instead of sitting on my *** waiting for someone else.

[Blakfeld]

Its not bad. Of course I would say work on the vocals a bit. I would say at least try to pronounce the words better. Like if you work on making sure you pronounce every syllable of the word it helps singing...ususally. I like the first minute of forgotten. I think it could be twice as good. I really like it. I would put a tad of reverb on my vocals. I don't like it where it goes to the Nirvana kinda sound around the one minute ten mark. Went out of key a few times. Wish I could play giutar well enough to record a demo instead of sitting on my *** waiting for someone else.


Thanks for the critique!

annecation has always been a problem for me...

Ill be sure to fix the times I go out of key though. Hopefully after I get everything else recorded Ill have a chance to go back and re-sing it.

Again, thanks for the critique!