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espf-250htd06
05-27-2006, 12:52 PM
And I ask god
How can I just sit here
And watch my every memory walk away from me

Ever step is a step away
Ever name just rings in my head over and over
There stuck I think,
I truly feel they’ll never leave me

If I could count the days I would
If I could count the hours I would
If I could count the laughs I would
If I could count that high
Then, I would probably be in college already

If I could count the memories
If I could be guaranteed by somebody,
Anybody
That this and us and myself would never be forgotten
Then maybe I would be satisfied

There are few moments that I can hold
That I know well never flash by
That will only stop time
I wont say goodbye but only thank you

vocman
05-27-2006, 01:08 PM
And I ask god
How can I just sit here
And watch my every memory walk away from me

ok

Ever step is a step away
Ever name just rings in my head over and over
There stuck I think,
I truly feel they’ll never leave me

Every?

If I could count the days I would
If I could count the hours I would
If I could count the laughs I would
If I could count that high
Then, I would probably be in college already

The last line here doesn't fit IMO.

If I could count the memories
If I could be guaranteed by somebody,
Anybody
That this and us and myself would never be forgotten
Then maybe I would be satisfied

ok

There are few moments that I can hold
That I know well never flash by
That will only stop time
I wont say goodbye but only thank you

good



It's an ok poem I guess. Not great, but decent.