New acoustic song, Please critique.....

[Invicta_Veritas]

http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?action=download&ufid=7E93DFEE2344CF35

This is a rough recording of a new acoustic song. I will put it on our website as soon as uploads aren't being screwed up (myspace.com/afterlifeofsorrow)

Thanks for any feedback.

[Nicko_Shmicko]

It wasnt too bad, vocalist sung very very low and kind of monotonous, and the bass tone was bad, but the acoustic didnt sound too bad. I think the song was a bit boring overall.

[Invicta_Veritas]

What exactly do you mean by bad bass tone? Distorted bass wouldn't very well fit :lol:

I don't see my vocals as being entirely that low, but most people do, so I guess I can't argue with that .

My acoustic stuff is meant to be more mellow listening though, hence I guess the monotony you're referring to. Some of the newer stuff is a little darker and more agressive; I have yet to finish it though.

[DylanYoung]

There is to much effect on the guitar track, as it seems. The vocals are kinda cool, but you should EQ them and cut some off the low. But it is easy to listen to.

[jarviss]

:thumb:

yeah...if you sing low..you sing low...thats you're voice i guess
but i can see past that and actually listen and hey..its not too shabby.
i can dig it

i think i woulda stopped it at 2:59 ..it felt like that coulda been the end of the song.... (IMO)

good job tho
-G

[Invicta_Veritas]

Any other suggestions? Things I could change within the song itself?