Have a listen to my mellow acoustic song

[carpediem12]

Let me know how you like it.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=448952&songID=3811628

[carpediem12]

feedbacks would be nice

[jarviss]

1. work on your singing..its not horrible by any means...but some notes seemed off...(way better than i could ever do tho...congrats)
2. guitaring sounds.....like it could be spiced up? maybe? or maybe not...it got "tiring" to me..
3. maybe vary the phrasing of your melody (vocals)...
it keeps repeating simliar...dun..da da dunn da da DUN DA DUN!
(over and over)
4. i liked the harmonica...i.t fit really well.
5. maybe try a new arrangment as far as structure goes?
like verse verse chorus verse verse chorus? or something?

overall good job
:thumb:

-G
keep it up, yo

[carpediem12]

1. work on your singing..its not horrible by any means...but some notes seemed off...(way better than i could ever do tho...congrats)
2. guitaring sounds.....like it could be spiced up? maybe? or maybe not...it got "tiring" to me..
3. maybe vary the phrasing of your melody (vocals)...
it keeps repeating simliar...dun..da da dunn da da DUN DA DUN!
(over and over)
4. i liked the harmonica...i.t fit really well.
5. maybe try a new arrangment as far as structure goes?
like verse verse chorus verse verse chorus? or something?

overall good job
:thumb:

-G
keep it up, yo


Thank you very much for listning and the comments. I agree with guitar parts. Its very basic, I will revist these songs in future hopefully.... im sure its never gonna happen haha

[jarviss]

good to get your ideas down tho....good start!
-G